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Damaged Ideals

Perfect at birth,
before the vultures arrived.
Bit by bit,
they take a piece of me.

Fragments being drifted away,
holding on to what is left as I flee.
Searching for a safe haven,
away from view;
Hoping that somehow I can make it through.

They,too,started life like I.
Why now,do they circle the sky?

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Written January 22nd, 2006

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  • Xxdeepdarkcradlexx
    April 21, 2006
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    great poem, it has made me wonder. and not many things do, so well done. thank you for entering and the best of luck

    xxdeepdarkcradlexx


  • The-Doctors-Angel31 silver member
    April 13, 2006
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    This is an awesome poem. Unfortunately there has to be those who want to pick you apart in life. They enjoy doing it too. Sad as it may be. Keep up the awesome poetry!!! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • leander gold member
    January 27, 2006
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    I really like the metaphors that you have captured within the lines of this poem here though it's quite dark, and a powerful complaint against society, somehow it has a soothing feel to it well done!
    Welcome to allpoetry

  • sarsparilla
    January 22, 2006
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    deep

    The second in your life? Blimey. I thought it was very good, till you said that. Now I think it's exceptional.

  • Anthony Myriad
    January 22, 2006
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    Very interesting to ponder this piece. The words make you think and make you adapt to this meaning that you have presented us. Thank you very much for sharing and welcome to AP. Tony.

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