Staring at my own reflection, pondering at each imperfection,
I gazed into the mirror clear, unknowing of what was near.
I went to turn away, but then I turned back to the mirror again,
for something had caught my eye, and I could not just pass it by-
a fingerprint so small and faint-the mirror's surface it did taint,
and just as I turned to look upon-just as fast as that, it was gone.
I thought to myself in disbelief, at this occurrence causing such grief.
Did I really see what I thought I saw, or was it just nothing at all?
Was my mind playing tricks on me, or was there more to this to see?
I stood there waiting for some time; looking, listening for some kind of sign,
but nothing happened, so I walked away, for my sanity was starting to fray.
I went to bed that night afraid, and in my heart, that horror stayed
until the dawn when the sun rose, after that no-one, until now, knows-
From the mirror I stayed away, 'til I heard a voice so softly say,
'Come back now to the mirror, and my intention will be clearer.'
So full of fright was I right then, I felt I would never breathe again!
But I made my way back to that place where the fear was reflected in my face,
and saw then a face in the fogginess made by a very soft breath,
and watched as the face took form into a figure so pale and worn.
Dead eyes gazing into mine-my heart almost stopped, frozen in time.
She beckoned to me with a bony finger, and I felt I could no longer linger;
into the icy mirror I stepped, unknowing of the things that crept
in darkness now encircling me, too dark for me to ever see
the mistake I made as the evil took hold, and I knew I was trapped in this prison so cold.
Now I peer outside the mirror, too, gazing at the sight of you;
looking at yourself-so free, wishing that could be me;
waiting for the day to come when I know you will succumb
to a fingerprint of a ghost on glass-then into my hell, you, too, shall pass.
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Written in the style of the great poet Edgar Allen Poe.
this poem won an honorable mention in the The Scariest Poem EVER!!!!! [Contest] by GoodNoodleStars74.
Written January 22nd, 2006
A contest entry
- Xx-Dark-xX(p.w. allowed) by know one.
300 points, ended February 29, 2008, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Ghost/Horror Story, NO RULES, PREWRITES ALLOWED. Have fun!:) Held by a 11 year old! by Daisy Ballerina.
565 points, ended January 8, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Good-bye Contest I'm Leaving AP (just added points) by BeautifullyBroken42.
576 points, ended January 12, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - making you scream by snakeprincess742.
400 points, ended February 12, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - DARKEST POEMS EVER by gigglesalot.
550 points, ended January 24, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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can you please go back and read what I would like for people to put in their Authors Notes. thankssss =]
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Ah, I read it, I just forgot to do it.
Too bad you already finished the contest.
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its very spooky...i love it!!!!!!!!!! sooooo chilling......i love that to!!!!!!! keep writin cuz u rock!!!!!! lolz xxsilentsuicidexx
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LOL Thanks.
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i loved it great poem , nice dark and unworldly you get a hug and a hard think as a finalist
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LOL Thanks. Yay hugs!
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wow this is great
so spoky and dark
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Fantastically creepy! I love the story! It gave me a chill! Great imagery. I could see it. I will be reviewing your poem again. Good luck!
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shudders oh creepy...I can easily see this in a book I have called Scary Stories to tell in the dark
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Yeah, in a way, I know what ya mean. I look forward to entering your next cntest. Thanks!
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yay!
This piece was very good, and very well written. The only
glitch I had was with the story line. The scary factor
was lessend by the fact that after seeing the fingerprint
you went to bed and pondered it being afraid for so long
before finally going back to it. If someone is honestly
intrigued or even frightenend the options would have been
to check it out immediately or never return to that spot. OR
the vision in the mirror should have appeared immediately
after the fingerprint, why wait if you're trying to capture
someone who is standing for a while in front of you? All
in all it was a very good poem, I just kinda lost interest
in the middle because the girl waited so long to attack, there
was not much suspense there. I will be holding another contest
similar to this in the future open only to those who have
entered this contest. Keep a look out Cuz I'd really like to
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Thanks. Glad ya liked it!
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lol almost had to read it twice but thats good...thanx for the submission good luck -evan
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Wow, this was written well, I loved the descriptiveness and imagery of it...It was very creative!It flowed well too which is always nice to see and your rhymes were used well...Great job!Thanks for entering it and for sharing it with me!HUGZ
Take Care and keep writing!!!!
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Wow..this poem is amazing..lol it made me think of a movie..if it was made into a movie i think i'd be scared to death..but i love how you wrote it..very enticing..so good job and i cant wait to read more of ur stuff
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sometime writer's block can give birth to a great poem this was one example, this was killer, i love this poem i need to add it to my wall, first i need to find my wall. this is a great piece, i will never look at my mirror the same way.
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WOW this poem tells a sad story but I couldn't even imagine the ending. Just a bit frightening, very suspensful and mysterious. This poem is amazing. Great great great great GREAT write. *suspiciously examines the 4 mirrors around me carefully in fear* Please keep writing....*walks away slowly* I think I'll be going now...
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wow, i love this poem, some of the parts didnt quite go with eachother as when there was an extra syllable or something but overall it was great...please keep up the work
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Wow, awesome write!! I mean... there's no way to describe it. Very eerie and chilling... incredible... you've almost rendered me speachless... wow, keep up the good work man, great job. -
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Wonderful poem. dang you even scared me with this. I don't think I will be looking in the irror anytime soon lolI bet your fav poet is edgar allen poe heh just kidding. Anyway thank you for sharing this poem with me and i can not wait to see what else you come up with. good luvk to you friend wherever your journey through life takes you. Keep penning for you have a real knack for it.
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GOOD FOR YOU YAY! Glad to see another TERRIFIC poem by my twin
To tell you the truth it sounded to me like a poem in the form of Edgar Allen Poe poems 
wow great job *shifty eyes* It scared me too *shifty eyes* This poem I think was too....surreal not to scare the crap out of you if you understand it. I LOVE IT
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