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The Secret Chamber

She is born today.
The Shower of Our Ways.
Within our eyes,
our lives,
She will find the truth.....
or lies.

~ 4 years have passed ~

“Stellar, be a big sprite and get the door - your Uncle Seuth is here.”
“Uncle!  Uncle!  ‘Mere and tell me a tale.”
“Aaah Stel, I musn’t let my manners fail.  We wouldn’t want Luna to get jealous.....let me put you down you zealous thing, and soon as I’m done with your mother’s hug, I’ll join you by the hearth.”
“Luna, are you sure she’s a sprite?  The way that child has grown!”
“Hmm.....well, there was this one night.....”
(Slaps his arm playfully.)
“Quit stirring trouble & go stir her mind before I lose mine, you old knome.”
“OK dear, climb on up here and we shall begin.....

On a cold, crisp, crystal evening,
not so many moons ago,
a special, special soul was born,
as I looked out THIS very window.
The snow was falling fiercely,
the wind was howling mercilessly,
and the instant She took her first breath, all was still.
The world remained silent until.....
Her first cry, then all was well.”
“Uncle Seuth, why was She so special?”
“I’ll tell you why.  Because as She grows,
She will see all that we are, and will take it all to heart.
Even when we think She doesn’t see, She does,
and will one day judge us.
She is The Shower of Our Ways.
Within our eyes,
our lives,
She will find truth.....
or lies.
Now, gimme a kiss, then down you go.  The hour is late, and I am due home.”

~ Five years after that ~

“Aster, my good fellow, (slaps him on the back) Lovely to see you again, my friend!  Now where on earth is your beautiful wife?”
“Uh Hah! You grow ever so amusing with the passing of the moons.
As you can see by the sky (gestures toward the window), Father,
that ancient wizard, has done lost his mind, and has Luna working overtime.”
“And where’s”
“Uncle Seuth!  Uncle Seuth!  I’ve missed you.”
“And I missed you too!” (Bends down for a kiss) “Muuuah.”
“Would you tuck me in and tell me a bedtime story?”
“I don’t know Stel.  I’m having such fun teasing your father!”
“Pretty please?”
“Well, with a plea like that, how can I say no?”
Stellar looks at her father, sticks out her tongue, and says
“I told ya so!  I told ya so!”
He lunges.....and she runs.
After she’s all snug in bed, Seuth begins:

“Many moons ago,
a precious sprite entered into our time.
She is closely guarded by the moon, the stars, and all of their friends.
BUT, there is ONE thing even they cannot protect Her against.
That secret though, is not to be revealed just yet.
Now, I will tell you what She seeks, & how Her journey will go.
She will grow into a bright, beautiful, inquisitive, adventuresome sprite.
On Her way She will encounter witches, wizards, and evil-doers.
They will try with all their might to beat out Her flame, to destroy Her imagination, but our sprite is strong, and will know that they are wrong. 
She will know that horses without horns and humans DO exist! 
She will persist on in Her quest to find the secret.....
The secret that holds everything of matter,
and the secret itself molds all of eternity.
The secret lives.....in a chamber, and tis very well hidden.
Many men have tried to find it’s entrance.....
and have died in their bid, their quest.
The Shower of Our Ways
will find within this chamber the truth of our lives.
And though She knows how many have tried and failed, again,
I tell you, She will persist in Her quest to find
the secret chamber.....where all truth resides.
Now, ‘m dear, you will have to wait for the rest.”

~ 6 years further ~

“Jupe, I need you to send Stellar home straight away.”
“Mom, what’s wrong?  Why are there tears in your eyes?”
“Stel, hon, I don’t know what, how to say.....Oh, hell!”
“Stel baby,” Aster breaks in as he takes her hand, his voice cracking,
“Seuth has gone on to another plane.”
“WHAT are you saying?”
“He has died hon.”
“But, but, he never finished the story!  He told me a story about a special sprite and a, a secret chamber, and how there’s only one thing She’s not protected from, how She’s The Shower of Our Ways.....”
“Come over here baby, and I’ll finish the story.”
“Daddy, you know how it ends?”
“We all do,” Luna cries through her tears.
“Many, many moons ago, and yet only yesterday,
your mother and I brought a special soul into this life.
The secret chamber of truth Seuth spoke of,
that is YOUR heart dear one.
And that ONE thing that old elf told you we can’t protect you from?
That is yourself.
Stellar,
YOU are The Shower of Our Ways,
it is within OUR eyes,
OUR lives,
that You will find truth.....
or lies.”

Author notes

This was different for me. I liked it (the process).
Written November 5th, 2002

A contest entry

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  • Stirrer of Stardust
    February 10, 2004
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    Well, gosh, thanks Mike.
    This took second to a VERY deserving poem by AnnD - check that one out too.....you should be able to find it with the link way up there.....I bet you'll find it to your liking. To say she is very talented really would be an understatement.

    Thanks for reading and for the wonderful comment. Oh.....I've been busy and have a few new writes up too, if you have the time and the inclination.

    ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ Love & Blessings, Janet ~ ~ ~ ~ ~

  • Haunted Pages
    February 10, 2004
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    Awesome!

    I had to read this twice. It looks like this was, indeed, very difficult to write. How did you fare in the contest? I’ve not read any of the other entries, but I just can’t imagine any topping this.

    There are several things about this that I really like, but the one thing here that really strikes me is your use of dialogue. I don’t know why, but a lot of poets shy away from using dialogue within their poems. Too bad, because, while it can be a difficult trick to master, it can make for some very effective storytelling within a poem. Your use of it here is exemplary.

    Great, great piece here, and I’m glad you steered me to it.

    Best,

    Mike


  • LizardKing
    November 12, 2002
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    This is quite a read. I enjoyed it immensely. The flow was excellent, and it was a smooth read. Keep up the wonderful writing, Janet!
    Love Mike

  • Stirrer of Stardust
    November 5, 2002
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    Thank you so very much. I tried to keep a steady rhyme scheme.....not an easy thing to do in a story format. Least not for me. I tend to let things roll in the moment, without planning things out. As above mentioned, it was different for me and I did have fun. Thanks again, Amy.
    ~Sincerely, Sunny~
    Edited by sunshinejls on right now because 'I needed to nosey'.


  • sweetevil
    November 5, 2002
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    you had fun with this i can tell. i had fun reading it. this is a very different kindof write for you, but it was still as good as the rest of your work.
    ~Amy~

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