Patches on my heart
My heart has been torn,
My heart has been sewn.
But the stiches are getting weak,
and they are coming out.
But I will try....
Just one last time.
In your eyes I look deep,
and you, I do not doubt.
and my heart?
Will you hold it close to you?
Will you care for it too?
I look to the sky Is our love realy true?
Author notes
Written January 21st, 2006
1st poem I ever worte. ;]
A contest entry
- Do you want your first trophy? by DarkHunter.
525 points, ended May 17, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - You're a heartbreaker by flyingphoenix.
475 points, ended June 11, 2008, 70 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is why I use duct tape (aka drugs,alcohol,endless hours of video games in solitude and othr escapisms) to keep my heart together and patch the holes in the soul.
Great write by the way.
-cheers
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Aww this is very nice!
The questions asked by many in love.
Marvelous write! Bravo
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I liked the opening lines, I can relate to that. A torn heart, that is being stitched and then repaired.
The last question is also thought provoking, it's what I am asking myself, was the love ever true?
Great poem, thanks for entering
Sunny
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This is sweet and tender poem that describes the feeling of love and how you wonder if it can really be true, like being in a dream you are scared to wake up for fear it will end. Thanks for the entry and good luck. James.
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what a pretty poem! i enjoyed it alot! good job tiffa
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ooo yay! i was wondering wat you write like. now i no and im impressed lol. its relay good. favorit parts but i will try..just one last time. it seems pretty organized too and flowing....it drives me NUTS when ppl's poetry is messed up n hard to read hehe
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lol thanks. This was the first poem i ever wrote by the way ^_^
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this is just great !woaw ! its so wonderful ! i loved this ! thanks for the entry ! best wishes in the contest !
your fan,
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When you have found a (new) love when your heart has been broken, then you still wonder if this person will hold the stitches together... something a lot of people will be able to relate to I guess
well done!
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What an excellent way to describe becoming vulnerable again! We all can remember those moments when we took the chance and offered ourselves to another, hoping that this was the one... only to find out that it wasn't. Friends surround with hugs, and we cry our eyes out. And, once we've finally passed that time of heartbreak, it starts again. There's only so many times we can stand it. I'm always amazed when I see friends take the courage to try that one more time after being spurned so many times before. They are certainly brave. And, you are too for even thinking of becoming vulnerable again. I enjoyed reading this piece, but I'm not sure if you meant to put part of your last line in bold. To remove the bold formatting, simply remove the asterisks around the words.
Thank you for sharing, and WELCOME TO ALLPOETRY!!!
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