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SOULitude

Storm of Silence
incessant noise.
Why have you come?


Pains of Forgotten
mind so numb.
Why does it still hurt?

Words within Words
unwritten meanings.
Why can I see them?

Soulflame in Me
belonging to you.
Why are you still burning?

Feeding of Mine
leeching fire.
Leave my flame alone!

and leave me..
Burning in Soulitude

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(c)2006, Filip H.F. "FiXato" Slagter
Written Friday, January the 20th of 2006, 17h10-17h30
Train from Amsterdam Central Station to Deventer
version 1.5
Written January 20th, 2006

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  • Trinity Point
    February 12, 2006
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    Interesting. You have an abstact view of this, yet, to me, it stands out perfectly. Now, I don't want to post it, as I don't want to taint the reading expericnces of all those others, but I really appreciate your style. Unique, rhythmic, well done! You know your stuff, and I congratulate thee.

  • Siiw
    January 25, 2006
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    I like the rhythm in this. I tried to read it out loud, and noticed that the first and second lines of every paragraph uses the same sounds in the words...that is nice, especially the lines "Feeding of fire, leeching mine". The background image fits the poem well, too.


  • JoFoxserian
    January 25, 2006
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    hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm. not really sure that i get it all that much, i get the end but the start is a bit scrathy.
    jo
    meh maybe i'm just tired.