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Would you notice?

Would you notice
If I cut myself
Before your very eyes?

Would you notice
If I listened to the same song
Over and over
Because I can
Relate to it so much?

Would you notice
If I hid all my pain
Due to fear
Of letting someone
Know me?

Would you notice
If I cried  myself to sleep
Every night
For three years?



















No.








You didn't.











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Written January 20th, 2006

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  • Zaria WindSong
    February 16, 2006
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    This is so good. I can elate to it right now. It's very touching to read this. Such a shame that people are so into themselves they can't hear or /see/ the cry for help.


  • petrichor
    February 4, 2006
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    I could relate with this poem so much, everything you said here echoed everything I have felt and everything I still feel. I liked the wide gaps. A lot of people often fail to see so many people are unhappy, but not everyone is able to see past through lies. This was just an amazing write.

  • Razor-Blade-Kisses
    January 20, 2006
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    wow thats really a great write i relate...alot!