She moved with desperation through the forest,
unable to find the sky,
She heard them coming but couldn't take flight.
She fought them with tooth and nail.
She fought them with crimson flames of red.
She refused to give up the fight,
But they bound her anyway.
She looked at the silken tether,
With which they would bind her to the earth,
so she could not fly,
destroying all hope of flight,
she lay on the ground,
unmoving,
and let go
of the Dream...
Author notes
This is an interesting piece. Because I put togeather some words and phrases I liked and it sort of grew into this piece.
Written January 20th, 2006
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I'm glad you liked my poems, I've been busy with some college work and haven't had time lately to write.
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Great Job. I love Dragons. She put up a good fight. Blessed Be, Aibell
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Nice one
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Thank youf ro your kind comments on my poem. But after reading it again, I decided some revisions were in order. I hope you like my changes.
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Thanks you for your comment on my purple dragon poem. I agree with your comments and think that it does need work. I believe this would perhaps work better as a beginning of a story instead.
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Thank you for your kind comments on my purple dragon poem it was actually supposed to be marked as a story and I feel it is still unfinished. But I loved the images so far.
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i love how you used the freeform of poetry to instill the imagery into our brains. it was truly a well thought out piece.
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This is a very nice presentation. The choice of text and background colors lend well to fantasy theme. The imagery in very clear and effective in imparting the sense of loss and despair. I do, however, have a little trouble getting a sense of the "story", if you will.
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I can see the scene described in the poem as if it were on a big screen TV, you said it all so well! I like this poem very much! I especially like the way it ends...
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this is REALLY good, but it would be even better if it rhymed a little more. but great job. it shows struggle and hopelessness, and displaying that kind of emotion is difficult. so, bravo, great job.
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