Like the bleeding eye that hides the ravening monster within. To take away the pain as forgiveness slips away. So that the beast within can tear your soul and consume your heart. Then like air to drift and swim on unseen current and hear words left unspoken and awaken dreams best left sleeping. An eye that is skewered on a fish bone, witness to the final scene and to take part in the tragedy that unfolds. Numbs as the part is played and then forgotten, left alone and awake in the dark. So time stands still to claim its forlorn triumph amongst the worms and rot beneath the earth. Then like thirsting roots reach out and discover a timeless treasure hidden in the deep. So that in the dust and ash that stands at rest life is reborn again. Then try and find where the dark divine sleeps away the ages. Bathe in bitter tears thus spent as eternity is wasted on the vain. Cry and rage as misery breathes it's last and emptiness is no more. With eyes closed see beyond the rim that lies in the mouth of sadness. To sing with a soundless voices that holds the truth by the eye. And eat the rot and worms and time triumphant in the earth.
A contest entry
- Show Me Your Insanity! by iFnlyLoveMe.
400 points, ended December 1, 2006, 21 entries
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Jamie, as dark as this was... I kinda found it uplifting... maybe I was looking for the joy! hehe
"Cry and rage as misery breathes it's last and emptiness is no more"
Wow.. wouldn't we all like to get to a place where the emptiness is no more and misery has breathed it's last breath!!
This was full of great imagery... deep places to delve and ponder on! I'm sure I will be reading this again!!!
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I liked the set-up of this write, almost diary like. It gave a sense of honesty to your words. Each line was uniquely written with interesting description and images like the "eye skewered on a fish bone" and "eternity is wasted on the vain". This had a strange beauty to it. I do agree, it also reminds me of childhood nightmares I had when I was younger. Thank you for entering my contest and thank you for sharing.
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I can't believe no one commented on this one yet, ... It's just great and so dark, you are very talented! I really enjoy reading your work.
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