Sweet seduction
by a heaven’s boon,
not conquered yet,
but I wish to be, pretty soon.
The undying flow of
love and kindness,
frightens my cruelty
with its calmness.
Unable to predict any predictions,
……………… Sweet Seduction.
Temple’s purity,
purified by her feet.
A magical magic
makes nature all neat.
Strong soldiers
make sure I stay.
Awesome attraction
wins the matter of clay.
She is a holy, sacred
truthful truth.
Not a dimensioned
delusion………
……………… Sweet Seduction.
- Vichitra Joshi (J.Vic)
Author notes
This poem was actually made in November, when i visited the Poetry Workshop organized by my State University. We were sitting on the bank of the river, Narmada ( she is beauuutiful ) and enjoying the natural scenario. Then suddenly our professor ordered us to write down a poem on that scenario and i came out with this poem.
I dont know if it deserves or not, but this is my most popular poem ever. Everyone in the workshop loved ( or acted to love ) this poem. The best thing was, instead of calling me by name few people called me as "sweet seduction" itself ( of which i feel very proud, i wont forget those moments ever ). And there was more to come, this poem got selected in a "Poetry Enactment" 
, in which I,Myself, got the chance to speak out this poem on stage 
. Many well-known regional writers were present in this poetry workshop, and they seemed to have like this poem much, or on the other hand, there may be a possibily that i was just being encouraged more because i was the youngest of them all, but in either case, tee hee, they made me happy.
Strong soldiers = Mountains surrounding the beautiful Narmada River.
Matter of clay = ME .
Thanks for reading.
Take cares and have a nice time.
- vic
Option Nature ( 3 )
Written November 14th, 2005
What did you think
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hey vichi.. Sweet Seduction!
ur a gr8 poet! u will become a gr8 poet or a writer one day!
You have created and impact by this poem as you the way you have written I can imagine that scene. The imagery is perfect!I loved the poem!
This definitely deserved to your most popular poem ever
You are a good gifted poet and writer!Good Luck!
One day you will reach high and I am sure you will prove and achieve it!
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Excellent
Wow this is cool keep up those rhyming skills -
Vic this one too is also wonderful. I just enjoy reading your stuff so much. You make it look so easy.
I wish I could write like that. Humph. I hate you. No I'm just kidding Vic. You know I love you.
Anyway great job I loved it.
<3 Catherine -
great
This is a great poem, for it expresses something few can do - and that is hard to put in words. I read this one several times, and each time got something, a feeling of the awesome power in nature. -
interesting yet mysterious...o_O
Well..Mr. Eternalpoet aka Vic interesting poem here, but you are still a mystery to me.
I do appreciate the comment on my Easter Sunday story.
Take care and God bless...
swp -
Wow, Not only are you a sweet person! You can write, I loved this, Very Nice. The only thing I have up is an angry piece that I wrote while being really mad, and kinda.. feeling crazy!
But I will soon have a lot more up
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that is really good i really like that how do u rite soo well... well im going to go lata
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wow. i read it a couple of times. i think it needs a few read throughs to really appreciate the depth.
the emotion is so powreful. that river must have really worked some magic on you.
take care and keep writing these beautiful words.
lillybet
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beautifull , i read it twice and then got to the actual depth ..i.e once before reading the authors comment and then after..very well written!!!
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Good write Vic. *applause* tee hee
Good Luck with future writes, not that you'll need it 
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Awww, this is so sweet
I don't usually read this kind of poetry,
seeing as I find the dark kind more interresting,
but this is very good!
*hugs*
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Well I thought I should return the favor and, since this is your most popular poem ever, read this one. Of course, it's all downhill from here now. Was this translated from another language? Just curious. I appreciate the notes you left on this. They help in understanding the intricacies of the piece. It takes me to far off lands. Thanks for the mini-vacation!
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abillionxabillion!!!
AWESOME, AWESOME, AWESOME, AWESOME, AWESOME, and, well... AWESOME! Really truly, I want to learn something from you. With every poem of yours that I read, just seeing the titles, even, I know the next will be even BETTER! Keep the ink flowing from that magic pen! -
yes
you should be proud, writing on the spot like that and comming up with such a beautiful flow
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Wow
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Hi Vic........
Hope you are doing gud dear.Well i just added my creation and then decided to go to yours.....Hey dear, needless to say you are truly awesome...I must appreciate the imagination yu have got....But yes i got to ponder when you said MATTER OF CLAY...Y SO????????Do let me know by earliest.I HAVE SEEN SOME OF YOUR OTHER CREATIONS AS WELL.But you said that this is your mst ppular one so i have commented on this only
Hope o catch up with you by earliest
Till then keep dancing to the tunes of life and haaaaan......Keep feeding the poet inside you
With Luv
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I think there's a reason it's popular..More than anything else..the wonderful flow and the usage of words, It has the ability to lull you into thinking that it's something you can identify with, and actually, it has so many layers, I can interpret it the way I like..That's what I love best about it
ria-k -
amazingly superb
Can I say I loved it? Pleeeeeeeeease?! Really I did! I enjoyed it so much! It was one of the greatest poems I've read in quite awhile. Thank you so much for your wonderful poetry! Which reminds me-I need to read more of it. Really awesome work! Keep it up or else!
~Jazz
P.S. Jazzeh
's you! I wanna win you!
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This is nice! Good job!
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hi young man, almost a year back someone asked me to visit your poems, but i think i wasted a year by not reading your poetry. now again i've started interacting here and find your poems very powerful. but your style is quite familiar to me... its a great mworkk young man... i'm impressed...
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hi young man, almost a year back someone asked me to visit your poems, but i think i wasted a year by not reading your poetry. its a great mworkk young man... i'm impressed...
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OH pretty i liked it
~Me -
oh my.......
i like "magical magic" very much
this is so poetic, an di am loving the imagery here. you have such minute details...i mean...i don't know how to say it. you have a gift on making the reader see and feel what you write. it is just so vivid. great word choice, friend. it was a pleasure to read. i think i was in happy land while reading
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i love this one. very amazing imagery hunny. *muah*
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Vic
I love the way you write!! The imagery you use with your words is absolutely amazing!!!! Maybe you should write one about Lady of the Blue Stars. lol
s and s
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I like this very much, I can see why they like it, you are a very gifted poet, maybe one day I will be better. I am gonna applaude as it's 10 points and I have not made many friends here yet.
Bye joanna -
Awesomnessosity on paper!!
falls in love with poetry... -_- -
flippin sweet!
great poem vic! it was very sweet.
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Sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet!
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I can see why everyone in the workshop loved this piece, it is great!! You have penned a perfectly seductive piece of poetry.
One to be proud of.
TD -
I agree with everyone, very beautiful...
~K~ -
Yes, I have to agree this is quite beautiful!!!!
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This is quite beautiful! I agree with many of those people about this poem! It's exquisite! Very lovely and the lines seem to sing to me!
Hugs Nicole xoxoxoxo -
wow- vic, i'm going to go ahead and try to read as many poems you've written. you inspire me. =)
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Wow who did you write this one for?? Lucky gal... great job. *hugs*
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hey buddy...nice poem man...the descriptions and the metaphors are really superb...
well done..
Parth. -
your use of ryhme is always outstanding. sorry I haven't commented for a long time, but I'm back now and I will read every single one of your poems in a minute. hope you are happy
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WOWA....Vic this was a great poem, and beautifully written
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Very nicely penned. Interestingly structured with a unique appeal!
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great
This was really Beautiful...... Good Job... So amazing -
Wow! This was amazing. Beautifully Write. Fantastic Poem!
~Jay~ -
Wow beautiful poem I loved this. Very nice work I favor this poem a lot.
Kelsey
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wow such a wonderful poem, i really enjoyed reading it. Keep up the great work, this is inspiring
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this is pretty amazing i must say. the way it is written is very creative and very phenomenal. Well done on the word choice and the flow of the poem. I really like it. It seems to be very heart felt and sort of seems to have some relation to your life. I could be mistaken though. I my life i often wish for these kinda things to happen to me and i always end up getting heart broken. Fantabulatic poem and respects to the pen.
Love, Jordan -
WOW WELL DONE ITS AWSOME!!!!!!!!!!!!1 ONE OF MY FAVORITES ITS BEATIFUL it has a nice flow to it im kinda speachless on this one ummm.............. lol i really dont know what to say really! soo lol good job!
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Nope, they were not simply encouraging dear Vic. This is a gorgeous write and very deserving of the recognition that it was given as well. You gave it a life with beauty and emotion and it is fantastic!
s and best wisehs always... ~genie~
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Kudos to you my dear sweet friend!!!!!
Vic, You are Sweet Seduction in my eyes. Your words are far beyond your years. I see why everyone felt the way they did about this as I am in awe of the beauty I just read on this page. You took my breath away with your words so deep. You see the beauty around you and then you express it magnificently.
I am so honored to have met you here and I hope we will always be in contact. You bring light and love to all you touch. This flowed as peacefully as the narmada river that you spoke of. I'm almost speechless. 
Not totally!
You just seduced my heart and won it with this write. I wish all could look at life through your eyes and heart, our world would be a much better place. No matter what life throws at you or how down society may be, don't you ever change. This is another masterpiece added to your collection and I thank you for sharing it with all of us. This sounds like it should win the gold and if I were judging it would be at the top of my list. Much love and blessings for you my sweet seductive friend, today and always.
Joyce
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may i shower some praises upon thee,
oh well done , u mark ur destiny,
with awegleaming words and enchanting flow,
i fail to seek an heart that does not glow,
i pledge my treatise, ur tribute, a silver quiver
i feel sure that so would feeel, narmada the river.
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this is incredably gorgeous and soothing in every detail. you are a amazing poet and exceptional friend
angel -
Pure emotion
it's a great poem....and i agree with the rest....a masterpiece...keep doing stuff like this!!
I like it even more coz it rhymes...don't mind i'm biased towards rhyming poetry!! Especially when there is not much deliberation the the rhyme
I liked the lines
The undying flow of
love and kindness,
frightens my cruelty
with its calmness.
LuV
VidZ -
Beautiful
Well Written,Theres some deep thinking ,good imagery and though i have not seen the river i think it must be beautiful and pure ,The poets inner reverence for Nature and the essence of purity is depicted well.i loved the lines"Temple’s purity,
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my pleasure
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YAY!! Hey vic Thankies very much for entering this piece into my contest, i loves it It's very, very lovely!
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AWSOME
OMG...I LOVE THIS POEM!!!! WELL DONE VIC...HEHE, I REMEMBERED UR NAME I HAVE YET MORE GREAT POEMS TO READ OF YOURS....UNTIL THEN, GOOD LUCK
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I doubt very much if anyone would fake their love of this poem. It is truly beautiful.
You captured the feel of the river and its beauty. Water is indeed a seduction. All we want is to dive in, swim in and have fun in her. She is powerful with that seduction.
Do not doubt yourself by wondering if they just faked anything. That would not have for this is wonderful.
be proud my son. Hold your head high and let it be know that you are indeed
Sweet seduction. Just like that river. Everyone loves you and is seduced by your charm and personality.
WELL DONE......CONGRATULATIONS on achieving that honour and accept it as being what you deserved.
BIG
Mumma Jan -
hey hey vic! brill poem! loved it!n im sure every1 at da poetry workshop actually loved ur poem, i like da way u started it n hey if as u ave said u wrote dis when ur professor ordered u 2 well let me tell u, u wrote a fantastic piece very quickly!n hey da imagery in it, is really gd, well cya sweet seduction lol
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A Wonderful Poem
Hmmm Vic, u are not sure of ppl's applause.. but i hope u will sure about my comments.. its simply amazing and make me feel that u can write on anything.Exactly the same happened with me but no force to write fm anyone but nature itself.. i hadbeen to Jim Corbett recently and sitting by lakeside of my cottage i gave birth to one poem.. which is listed over here and incomplete.. now u will have to help me.. Oops.. i deviated fm commenting on your poem.. am sorry... I ENJOYED READING IT VERY MUCH.. God bles u Vic.. Anoushka -
Fantastic!!
hiya vic this piece was amazing, really. i enjoyed reading it soooo much and i wish you lots and lots of luck in the contest. hope you win keep writing and lotsa love
~Rozzy~ xxx-xxx -
hey Vic! It's me..again...heh I really liked this..but all your poems are good so that's really not saying anything
I really don't know what to say...but thanks for the comment on my poem!
your friend,
Lisi
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A masterpiece ***** five stars
Dear Vic, Bravo my little Chickadee, well written and well deserving of being read out on the stage, it's wonderful my dear friend. You have every right to be proud of yourself, it's a masterpiece. I'll have to get Lady Joan to read it she'll love it.
Love from your pluff pluff spongey doll
Jenni.
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Dear vic,
This is a very sweet poem, one of the best poems I've ever read on AP. There's no doubt about the purity, elegence and sprituality that flows with Narmada. Your poem has all the beauty and all peace. I loved the rhyme and the title has an amazing effect on the prose. This is absolutely the 'Sweet Sedutction'
Luv
-Neha -
wow..dear Vic,guess what?I thought you've written these lines for me"She is a holy, sacred
truthful truth."
ok..ok..but remember to write for me one.I'll forgive you this time.
But really this is a great beautifully penned piece my dear Vic.Sure it deserves to be loved by all.
Shahrzad
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lovely
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really well written mate. i cant give long descriptions but this one is really well written. bravo.=D>
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This is spiritual imagery at in its true form.... very well written indeed. I can picture you sitting at the river and admiring the magic of it all. Very well expressed.
Best,
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This is very impressive vic... your word selection is great... the subject is perfect too... i wonder what's with rivers nowadays...anyway, keep it up! hope to see you here soon!
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oh wow Vic!!! this is totally mindblowing, I ADORE IT! i totally wanna put this on my rooms wall, or maybe in my kitchen, my mom read it and shes jumpin up and down! Best of luck on this contest, although i'm prettysure you don't need the luck!
love you
~Lea
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