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A Poem Of Friendship


A Poem Of Friendship

“Call Me Pythias, Good Damon”

by ROBERT DAVIDSON

to escape the prison of my skull
you have become a necessary part of me
lurking on the fringes of my dream

relationships i find are vast deserts
demanding all, challenging all
and for that purpose we are given one another

left to myself i become inward, morose
whipped by self-pity's bitter lash
so when the ultimate separateness of soul frightens me
i return gratefully to the sympathy of touch

a friend of entirely different temperament
becomes a relief from the monotony of personality
a balm for the wounds of human love

now i know the thoughts of your heart before you speak them
our solitudes broken, you help me find myself
i guard your privacy in fear of my own

© 2006 ROBERT DAVIDSON, All rights reserved









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Written January 19th, 2006

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  • Brooke Arabie
    June 13
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    good right..but nothing to do with commitment which the contest was about...thx for the entry


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    October 14, 2008

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    This is a pleasantly non-cliched view of friendship, and beautifully written. Unfortunately, since it has been in contests before mine, I'll have to remove it from my own contest. Thanks for entering, though!


  • Redeemed15
    August 7, 2008
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    I like this poem. I just don't quite think it's what I wanted. Great job though. Keep writing.


  • slipperssun gold member
    October 12, 2007

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    thank you for your entry into my contest... this is a very deep write and shows your abilities well. i wish you luck
    cheers
    Jen


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 12, 2007

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    Great

    A very unique write, lot of words used that I would have expected to see in a dark write. Flow is good even without punctuation. Good luck in the contest!

  • tiarna
    August 25, 2007
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    great write


  • Not-The-Sun
    June 26, 2007

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    the words usually associated with darkness here describe a friendship- very unique and powerful. good luck and thanks for entering the contest


  • Maatkara gold member
    May 21, 2007
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    Very nicely done!


  • Dead Hair
    May 13, 2007

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    Very dramatic, alluring, the words really take a hold of you. Strong from the beginning to the end. Well done!

    -You just need to tell me what family member you will be to me.

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    May 10, 2007

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    Fantastic wording, I like the brevity of this write and that you did not lose any power in the short piece. Deep, touching and versatile write. *hug*s and best wishes ~Genie~


  • sublimewriter
    April 12, 2007

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    i like the part about keeping things private. there are friendships that went awry because of a slipped tongue and confidentiality is important to me. thanks for entering my contest

  • xieyipainter
    January 19, 2006
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    great write!

    I enjoyed this piece a lot though I would have preferred to see punctuation and proper capitalization...I like some of your phrasings such as:"relationships i find are vast deserts" and "whipped by self-pity's bitter lash"...loved the last line of this poem as it is very telling of the author's inner turmoil...I do find it a bit on the dark side--was this your intent?

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