I could see the flowers smiling
when I told you of my love
I could hear the gentle coo-ing
Of that watching morning dove
Sunlight bouncing all around
reflecting the drops of dew
As a tear drop started falling
from my eyes so filled with you
The moment truly captured
in my soul and in my heart
That Love we shared together
right from the very start
I often see that moment
from which our "Heaven" grew
When I saw those flowers smiling
When I said that "I Love You"
Mr. Doug
Author notes
A Poetry Story for the Young-at-Heart
Written May 15th, 2003
A contest entry
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i loved this piece! it was magnificent! the metaphor of the flower is wonderful of love! thank you for your entry!
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Thanks for the entry, but it's not quite what we were looking for. If you would like further explanation, please send me a private message and a link to the poem and I will be glad to discuss it with you.
Elizabeth -
You have painted some beautiful nature imagery in this piece. I loved the line about flowers smiling...it is just so very romantic! Thankyou so much for sharing this in our contest.
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Broken Doll
Thanks for your kind comments - they are appreciated
Mr. Doug
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LOVE IT! Wahoo! Short and sweet - to the point. I only would take "that" out of the last line. It flowed so gently and the title drew me in. I could picture you telling her you love her in a garden... So sweet and romantic... (swooning..)
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Very Nice Write
Very nice write again Doug, A very sentimental piece over flowing with thoughts of love and feeling. Keep up the good poeting, Andy
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