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Table 104

 

 

Table 104 has fallen silent.
I wait for her
and the moments  
we shared
     to return…
         …but time refuses to let them go…

We sat opposite each other
and above the surface
 hearts played
    eyes met
in simple enjoyment
and idle conversation.

If I had extended my hands,
would she have held them there?
I reach my hands out now
and find an empty chair.
A table is unoccupied,
the loneliness reflected
in its grains.
    It is table 104.

Do I sense it weeping? 
I think I hear it groan 
with an understanding and compassion
born of many such tragedies,
for I do not believe my loss here would have been its first,
and it...
we... will never get used to it.

Time leaves vacancies
and silences
it seems.
Table 104, if you knew this, why did you not warn me!?
I will not hold this against you,
for there was ever hope
for a pleasant future
between two who once sat opposite over you
in exploring moments
that will ever exist between genders...

Time, if you were paper,
I would crumple you
in despair.

What are you, Time,
when you leave behind a beautiful relationship 
at table 104?

And what of you, Life?
You have become but a silly poem
with a lousy title
left behind on an empty chair.

 

Author notes

From personal experience... more hope in reality than depicted in the poem... the table is from the MSN gaming room, the Corner Pub, I believe...
Written January 18th, 2006

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  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    thanks, Cnd, I'm sure when she regains her strength she'll be back...!


  • Airborne Ed silver member
    January 22, 2006
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    The lady who sat at 104, has such a beautyiful soul. Such a beautiful tribute to someone so extrodanary. Her laugh, her smile, made every game special. She takes white and you black and at the end, some very special moments were shared. You wrote a very special poem. I hope she is not gone forever. Please keep checking table 104 she just might leave a note behind for you to read.

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Thanks, my newest AP sister... just going over your comment here... I hope things will go well for the both of you for a good long while yet!

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    thanks, sis, just catching up on your comment here... and a classic it is... it will find itself on my author page...

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Thank you for the comment, Scotlass. As for you question about this sad piece being from personal experience- yes, not only from personal experience, but from AP experience! What better place for inspiration than interacting with other poets and living out life together? So a warm welcome to AP, a place where the unexpected will happen!


  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Thanks, Grossmutti, valuable comment there! (I was searching for the word 'personification'!) lol

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Thank you, Auntie Rae! Your comment was most appreciated and helpful, as I wasn't too sure any emotion got through... sometimes I'm sure of it, other times, I'm not... glad you liked my intelligent table, too!

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    thank you, alainasarkar, my very romantic poet! Yes, there is some sadness in romance... and may you also find much inspiration here on AP! an applause for a comment that will go into my 'favorites' featured on my author page! lol
    Edited on Jan 22, 8:57 p.m. because ''.

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Thanks, sal, high compliments, all! As a matter of fact, I'd like to use the initial part of your comment as one of my all-time favorites (featured on my author page!) (nice to have a few adult comments sprinkled in!) (that doesn't mean I don't enjoy my younger associations here!)

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    hajgora7... hmmm... I've only played a few games with SweetSilver and a few others so far... and a stranger... could have been you! (close game, I made a few blunders and lost! lol) Backgammon? I've played long ago... but not lately... I'll stick with the casual 2 out of 3 chess! Table 104 is in the Corner Pub I believe...


  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    A late thank you, Shahrzad, for the feedback on this sad piece, glad you liked it...

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    thanks for the sound life advice, my other Linda! Yes, this was a sad piece... but not so sad in reality... SweetSilver here left to deal with a few things in her life... so her return is likely... if not, I'll be back to revise the poem with REAL sadness!

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    thanks, Ms. Lady T, for the valuable feedback here... for being understood is important! and welcome to AP, may you find much inspiration here!


  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Thanks here too, Di, now I owe you several comments...! lol

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    thanks, puzzle, glad you got something out of this piece... dwelling in the past, hoping for a miracle... in this case the prognosis looks good for her return, however... so the sadness isn't that deep here... yet!


  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Thanks for the comment here, Mal, and the heart-rending story, and, of course, the drink...


  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    thanks for the comment, Kindred, and I love your comments on your author page! May we dream alike...

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Thanks, leah, now you being a member of the CCG group gives you license to be critical, if not in the comments area, then at least in an IM! and yes, me being a perpetual tinkerer, I have tinkered with it many times since your comment! May we continue to think alike...

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Thanks for the feedback, RS, always appreciated... unusual, a compliment here! Love your pic... waiting for a bite from a croc, no doubt...!

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    thanks, pixie, for the comment, always appreciated! and glad to have left you in awe... I hope you find much inspiration here on AP... be it happy or sad!


  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Thanks, Ruby Sky, your comment was appreciated! and welcome to AP... a fine place for inspiration!

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    a belated response here, granny... thanks for the comment... table 104 is at the corner pub of the chess section of MSN gaming... so it is a virtual table! But holder of many secrets, nevertheless! lol

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    thanks, Bekah, for the comment... I believe Gemma will be back one way or another, after the upheavals in her life settle down a bit...


  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    thanks for the comment, D, glad you liked it, from way over where you are!

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Thank you, Dreamee, for the comment and applause... a bit sad, this piece, yes, but I believe the real picture isn't quite as gloomy...


  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Hello, Janet! Yes, I'll take you up on that offer...

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Yes, Truly, my opponent was not above employing such tactics herself! lol She once beat me in 5 moves! and I often have to battle back from two pieces down... yes, hard to get the focus, it is!

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    thanks for the comment on my sad poem, Ms. Nirvana... every feedback is important... and I hope you don't sit alone for too long! also welcome to AP, I hope you find more good than bad! (of course you will, I hope you just see it!)

  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    Thank you, reckless, your comment is an important feedback! and welcome to AP... hope you find some inspiration here!


  • wbiro gold member
    January 22, 2006
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    thanks for the comment, Laura... I do see a brighter future than depicted here...!


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    January 20, 2006
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    I agree with Lepekaha, I hear you too, I hear the faint traces of laughter from that table too. Hang in there, the chair won't be empty forever. The hand was given in friendship, it will need to be held one day too, I'm sure of it. Thanks for sharing. Be well. La x

  • recklessgrace
    January 19, 2006
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    awwww how sad.......wonderful simply wonderful job. I LOVE IT!!!!


  • stillinnirvana
    January 19, 2006
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    Aww that is so sad. Full of despair but so not fear because I too sit alone at table 104.


  • TrulyLoothy
    January 19, 2006
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    as a former tourny chess player I can relate to this..I once lost a chess game to a really hot girl...she was so hot I couldn't concentrate on the game


  • January 19, 2006
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    may I jaion you at table 104?


  • DreameeDarlin2U
    January 19, 2006
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    Superb! Love it, Love it! Although a bit sad...it kept me reading. How many times have I gone into a restraunt and looked at table once occupied by me and someone else. Amazing. I applaud you.


  • Malleus Maleficarum
    January 19, 2006
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    Wow. This is simply fantastic. I love this. Brilliant job!

    DXS


  • metrophobiac
    January 19, 2006
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    Oh wbiro. I hear you. I hear you asking, wondering....what could I have done better? Would one word one exchange...would it have made a difference? changed anything? oh why didnt she let me know...i couldve been there...i miss her....wbiro, i hear you. I hear you loud and clear. It saddens me, too. Hang in there, buddy. Bekah


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 19, 2006
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    I too liked that paper crumpling section - very creative. Great sidebar to this poem, table 104. Curious as to where this table might be - what kind of establishment it was in - restaurant, bingo hall, etc?


  • Jinks13
    January 19, 2006
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    This, I reeeaally enjoyed! What a great write. I think most can relate to that moment lost and the regret of inaction! And the way you've described it here, really refreshing. My favorite part being...
    Time, if you were paper,
    I would crumple you
    in despair.
    Actually, the last three stanza's really got me. Really, really great!


  • dark desire
    January 19, 2006
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    i love it! the feeling leaves you in aww i think. keep up the good work. ~pixie~


  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    January 19, 2006
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    thought provoking,sad

    An unusual structure for an unusual subject. I enjoyed the poem very much. I think you thought about it for a long time and the result is great.

  • leahofmaria
    January 19, 2006
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    oops! I just typed up an entire long comment, but I see that you don't want any critical comments on this piece. So I'll just say this.
    I think it has potential to be really unique and interesting. I would encourage you to look at it closely and revise.

  • KindredDreamer
    January 19, 2006
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    And I would've applauded, but I ran outta points.

  • KindredDreamer
    January 19, 2006
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    This is wonderful! I love the emoion that comes from it. I especially like the end with time and life. Keep it up!


  • Malabu
    January 19, 2006
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    well wbiro.....this is very thoughts profound......it brings back memories of a table I shared with someone.....once a week....she was the love of my life....we would order side orders of fried clams.....we loved the time spent sharing this moment...never dull......it would be there that we decide where to go for the evening.......the smile still lingers after all these years....sweetier moments.......we both could still share.....but today.....shes gone....and so is the table we spent our emotions with.....love this thoughtful and memrorable poem......
    drinks on me dude......and a clappie too.....
    Malabu


  • puzzledone121
    January 19, 2006
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    very sad piece and made me think of someone...very often, we dwell on places frequented in the past in the hope that a miracle will happen and someone you still secretly cherish will pop in...funny, felt that way too, only, i smoked at lounge 12...


  • masterblaster gold member
    January 19, 2006
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    Hi, yes it worked well, I like the way you played with words, like a cat with a mouse, making them slaves to your command, a lot of fun, very nice write,all the best, hugs Di


  • mzladyt
    January 19, 2006
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    How sad. Very well done. You put it into a picture that I could easily understand as I was reading this. Great job.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    January 19, 2006
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    So many of those empty seats at table 104.. I felt your pain, but it has it's very fine points,..never wait.. time is to precious..lol..find 105 and move on..this could have been funny if it was not so sad..
    the other
    Linda

  • Ir.muse
    January 19, 2006
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    This is a wonderful saddddddddd piece.
    Shahrzad


  • cafegroundzero gold member
    January 19, 2006
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    Very good! The defendant is not guilty of a l

    I may have even played you once, as hajgora7. Or maybe we passed over each other's name and never even played.

    I want to bookmark this.

    Do you play backgammon?

  • salparadise
    January 19, 2006
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    Excellent

    Absolutely fantastic! You display a playful, mocking tone in some of these lines, but you are also able to turn on a dime and turn deadly serious. This made me think of a thousand Denny's and Waffle Houses where I have spent hours engrossed in meaningful discussions with friends and lovers. The memories we associate with places and objects have a peculiar hold over our lives - it's amazing. The rhymes in this work came at appropriate times and with withering accuracy. There's not one wasted line in this work.

  • alainasarkar
    January 19, 2006
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    you let your emotions run wild in this piece. its an excellent piece and it shows just how much you liked that girl.


  • B Chandler
    January 19, 2006
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    instantly theres a stop/go feel to this and the emotions that went along with it was all the more present as well. Moreover, you took it a step further by giving an inanimate object, like the table, a couple of emotions too which i liked alot

    Auntie Rae


  • nichtmich silver member
    January 19, 2006
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    Exquisite

    Lovely personification of a table and set of chairs. So imaginative!!! All I can say is...wish I had thought of that first Truly fantasic poem by a fantastic poet.


  • Scotlass
    January 19, 2006
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    lovely heartfelt poem filled with deep sadness and yearning. I hope this is not from personal experience.


  • Catressa gold member
    January 18, 2006
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    What was it that left me feeling your loneliness I wonder? Somehow this little piece has the power to break your heart, with its wanting and need.. Soft smile for you my friend.. It is beautiful


  • wbiro gold member
    January 18, 2006
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    thanks much, stardust... thanks for the 'wicked'...!


  • wbiro gold member
    January 18, 2006
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    thanks, alias... I actually did try to infuse the poem with my feelings, but I was soooooo tired...!


  • Stardust100
    January 18, 2006
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    excellent poem heart felt keep ya chin up your a wicked poet


  • externalalias
    January 18, 2006
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    Yet, you still write awesome poetry, though it is a pity you had to suffer to write it. You have reflected your feelings, without letting anyone truely feel what you feel, which is thoughtful and kind, much like the feeling portrayed in this work, please keep it uop, certainly worth reading!!!
    Alias x

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