My Sleeping Prince
I watched you sleep last night
the stars took you drifting over clouds and hills and lakes
your eyelashes wrinkled and i could see you were happy
i resisted touching you, i didnt wanna take you away from the dream land
your chest moves
and you make a little funny noise - like a new born kitten
smiling i try not to laugh as your usual strong self transforms to something so fragile
i will keep watch over you- i will keep you safe
its so hard to believe your mine
that life has given me your love
that is why i can not sleep!
what if you turn out to be a dream - disapearing as the sun rises
Author notes
i love you
Written January 18th, 2006
A contest entry
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400 points, ended February 9, 2006, 10 entries
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This is good, I enjoyed it, nice work!
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Hmmm... this is cute... I think you need to fix your grammar. Okay, but not amazing in my eyes. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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UPON ANOTHER READ
I KNOW YOU WILL BE UPSET BECAUSE EVERYTHING HAS BEEN...BUT I HAVE BEEN STRICT ON IT SO I HAVE TO ALLOW THE RULES FOR WHICH I WROTE...I AM SORRY MY DEAR ...YOU FORGOT 1 RULE...A PITY ...YOU MAY FIX AND REENTER IF YOU SO CHOSE...ALWAYS FRANCES -
WHAT A WONDERFUL WRITE
SO LOVELY TO SEE YOUR LOVE FOR YOUR MATE WRITTEN IN SUAH A WONDERFUL WAY...MAY YOU ALWAYS FIND HAPPINESS...FRANCES
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A wonderful love you've written here. I found my prince and could never be any happier. Once in love your whole out look on life changes. Poems of our love I write about so often. Maybe you'd like to check them out. Thanks for sharing. Rose
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Aww this is sweet. me and tom are suckers for a love story and this shows how much he means to me especially the last stanza. great write. Good Luck
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Every night she would stay with me and she would be so weirded out when in the next morning i would tell her how i watched her sleep through the night hardly sleeping a wink myself, just because she was so innocent and peaceful and it put me in a trance everytime. Im glad your love has come back to you. never let him go!!!
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thank yo for the comment on my poem i had wrote it just after me and my boyfriend decided to get back together after we had broken up, its a poem close to my heart xx
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Wow. I know exactly what you mean. this is so beautifully written, and has fantastic imagery. I love this poem!!! almost crying at the prettyness (silly sentimental me) ahhh. Keep writting. If this is from experiense i hope it doesnt become a lost dream. -
Aww an amazing Piece! Very nice, beautiful yet the final stanza came across as quite sad. But an intresting write, I like your style and the form your write in keep it up
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wow this poem is lovely really nice. Thanks for commenting on my poem also I see what your saying about putting her first. the mainproblem i have is she dislikes men she is just 2 and she decides who i see in soe aspects it's hard
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