DRAGONS
Beneath the fires and the molten lava of the earth,
There lies an ancient magical dragon,
A dragon that can resist and breathe fire.
Its scales are black with the redness of flames,
Its eyes are two reddish-orange ambers.
It spreads its wings and flies through the sky,
With the rising and the setting of the sun.
Among the earth’s oceans, seas and rivers,
There lie mystical dragons of old.
They glide in the water and befriend all creatures of the seas
Their scales are sapphire blue and with gills,
Their eyes are of topaz, with a tinge of silver,
And they are called The Water Dragons
Above the earth’s valleys and forests,
In the mountains their lies an earthly dragon.
It bears the powers of nature,
Its friends are the trees and the flowers.
Its scales are of a dark green,
And its eyes are like emeralds tinted with gold.
High above the clouds and the earth
There soars a dragon of myth and legend
Its friends are the birds and all the creatures that roam the sky
Its scales are white and its eyes are sky blue
It circles the sky and helps its creatures.
All these dragons live in peace and harmony
But only the other mythical creatures can see them
And can witness a rare and magical scene
The rising of the Fire Dragon with the sun,
The rising of the Water Dragon with the waves,
The taking off of the Nature Dragon,
The soaring of the Sky Dragon,
And the unity of all four dragons.
All rising and soaring together,
Just like four brothers, as told in a legend.
By: Nada Adel Sobhi
© Copyrighted 2006
Author notes
(this is my first Dragon poem, please tell me what you think.)
(Written January 1st, 2006)
Option #3
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A contest entry
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What did you think
Comments
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Very nicely done indeed.you have done a wonderful job with this piece. I could see them in flight and swiminhg amongst the waves. Good imagination in this piece. Thank you for sharing. it with us.
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This is perfect...nice imagery and the descriptions are amazing. I've never read anything like this...Please continue with your amazing use a words to paint these pictures.
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thanks for entering and goodluck in the contest.
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I like the theme of bonds and each having a relation to some aspect of Nature. You paint a fantasy vision with undertones of commune. Blue
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Lovely dragon write! The spirit of the mysterious...the fire within. Eyes of emerald and gold...peaceful and harmonious. I love dragons and all the power and magic the possess. Wonderful job here!!!
Blessed be,
Azlyn
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you wrapped this up perfectly! I love it when it comes to dragons, they are my fave fabled in the world! Greaaat job in your conception of this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Very good. Dragons aren't my favorite fairy tale creature but i love this poem. With each different kind and everythign. I like this. Thank your for joining my contest and good luck!
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Thank you so much for your comment. I am glad I was able to make you like my Dragon poem, despite the fact that they're not your favourite creatures
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thank you so much for reading, I'm glad you liked it.
Nooni -
really nice description and a really good sense of the fantasy lands...
thanks for entering, good luck
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Thankyou soo much Praise
I'm really glad you liked it
Thankyou for reading and commenting
Nooni -
I'm not much into the fantasy genre so I'm not too familiar with similar poems, but I must say you have a good way with imagery.
It seemed simple as far as the writing style yet you added lots of color and action as well as true to life description. That helped to make it very real and seem almost living.
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Thankyou soooo much!!!!
Its ok lol ... i'm really happy you like both.. you raised myt spirits today! THANKX!!!!
Nooni -
He He Nada. I think I have read this one before. I don't know what my comment was...I hope it wasn't rude though. I think this was in the featured box when I read it. Hmmm it is probably a few pages back.
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Wow...this is good just like Nada...now I can't pick my favorite!
lol
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thankyou sooo much Ktulu
Glad you enjoyed reading my poem
Nooni -
I really enjoyed your writing. I love dragons and I felt this depicted them very well. Thank you for sharing this with us, keep up the great work.
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I could see the dragons...feel the fire and feel the exhileration of soaring. Great write. I really enjoyed it.
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I actually meant to do the order of description thing.. i prefer doing things in respective order
(i write free verse lol.. not rhyme and i can choose my own words lol)
Thankyou for reading and commenting.. glad you liked it
Nooni -
The description in this is no less than superb, I could visualise the dragons, the movement and the colours. I liked the idea of there being four dragons and four elements, it gave it a sort of spiritual feel, as though the dragons are a part of the world itself. The only criticism I could give for this would be that the flow is a little jerky, some lines don't quite seem to fit in with the others. Also, some stanzas are incredibly similar, the ones that describe the dragons describe them in the same way and same order. These things can easily be changed by rearranging words etc. Thanks for sharing this with us all anyway, I did enjoy it! Take care, Heather x
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Well done! Excellent description and imagery! I love the final image of them flying up together. Good job!
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Thankyou sooo much Sv, for your lovely comment and encouragement, i have many fantasy poems, and most are about unicorns.
If you liked this, then i hope you'll enjoy reading this one too, it is very long, but i really hope u read it..
allpoetry.com/Poem/1787326
Thankx again,
Nooni -
Thankyou soo much for the comment and applause.
Nooni -
Hey, I totally loved this peice. I cant write fantasy stuff so I indulge by reading things like this. For your first dragon peice this was certainly amazing! I loved the style you wrote it it, it gave a clear image that helped me to see what you were writing. Congrats on a great peice!
SV -
very cool
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Thankyou soo much Cassie..
I didn't know that there were 12 types of Dragons.. but it is all very interesting.
I'm really glad you enjoyed reading my poem, thankyou for the lovely comment and applause.. it is highly appreciated
Nooni -
ROCKINAWESOME
This is very beautiful.....I love this you are very good yourself....in the book i read there are around 12 major Dragons....and each one has a different danger in themselves....some are red to blend in with the lava...some are blue to hide in the waters....some are black to hide against the black night sky...i only wish these creatures were alive i would love to befriend one....well as i said this is beautiful LOVE ITTTT!!!!!!!
Cassie -
i want one!!! i always wrote about magically dragons that would come and carry me away from the 'bad' people so i like it now, as an adult, when i get to read about my buddies from childhood. this is great. viyanna langager
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Well, I loved your other poem that incorporated Dragons, I told myself, What the heck let's check out this poem! I must say, I was not let down. I think I was missing out on a lot when I wasn't reading your poetry. Now that I have absolutley all the time in the world (New Semester, new schedual in school, new classes, less homework ^^) I can comment on a lot of your poems, in return for all the poems you've commented on from mine
Take Care!
x patientgrace x
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thankyou so so much Krystal
i'm really flattered, glad you came by my poem
thankyou for the lovely comment, it is highly appreciated
Nooni -
Well for a first dragon poem I think you nailed down a good one.I love dragons, and this one has done a good job at giving a life and vitality tot he sacred ones. keep writing!
Blessings-
Krystal
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thankyou soo much Dee... i'm speechless
thankyou soo much for your lovely comment and applaud
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Excellent
Nooni...this was a beautiful poem about dragons indeed... you have named the Sacred Dragons and have done such a good job of describing them... the other dragons agree that the sacred dragons are invisible except to those who believe in them and who write about them... from this moment on you are part of the dragon clan...
... Dee
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thankyou sooo much Khal, i'm speechless after your comment
thankyou so so much for the lovely comment and the applaud, both are highly appreciated
Nooni -
thankyou my friend, i realy don't know what to say except "thankx a million for your lovely comment on my poem"
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Excellent poem NooNiThEWitcH, very good, you have a wonderful talent at writing poetry, sorry it took so long to reply, my internet wasn't working for over a week!
good luck in the contest
best wishes as always
Moonstone Virgo
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awesome poem
I love dragons!! you did an excellent job with this piece, very mystical and fun to read! keep up the great work Nooni!
~Peace Out~
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Well it is a beautiful knitted story of the wonderful character with a wonderful imagery and description through the magical words here in the poetic forms , creating a melody of the peculiar in impacts too.The thoughts depicted here are very magical and touching the depth of the story with its different stages of the curiosities through and through.The flow of the write is very deep and very slick too.I really appreciate this work.prabhudayal khattar
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thankyou soo much my friend
i'm really glad you enjoyed reading my poem.. (its my first dragon poem )
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I love fantasy. Dragons seem like such mystical creatures...evil or good is how they are portrayed. I love how you described the dragons. They sound so beautiful. Write on.
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i'm speechless to your commentary spamwitch
i really dunno what to say, except thankyou thankyou soooo much -
I promised I would return and so I have, just so you know, I went to your home page to access this so as not to cost you points. The poem itself is written beautifully, I like the way you mixed it up and I like your rhyme scheme. The subject, or more-so the inspirational wisdom as the dragons unite is ultimately my favorite part of this story. I like how you took a mythical creature and gave them soul..how they are able to live in harmony though there are little differences in them. All around wonderful write with a great message.
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thankyou soo much joy
glad you enjoyed reading my poem... umm i'll do spell check (i did on the word and there wasn't anything) could you please tell me which words didn't seem right??
thankx again -
crystaldust 20-01-06 22:14
What a lovely lot of dragons, Nooni, I love the different kinds you've described - really interesting ones too. Your spelling is a little adrift, though. Could you look the poem through again and see if you can change some of the words? I really enjoyed the poem a lot. Joy
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thankyou soo much for your lovely comment
really glad you enjoyed reading my poem -
thankyou soo much Suseann for your lovely comment
and thankyou for the applaud too
glad you liked my poem -
I think this was excellent in discriptivness and I loved the touch of each having it's own domain too.~~~Suseann
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Brava!! Well done!!
A wonderful tale Worthy of a weaver of words I really enjoyed reading this wonderful write The rhythm is catching and the imagery so colorful!! Alas, I am out of applause and this grand piece is so worthy Brava!! Well done!!
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Thankyou Super Mo...
your comments and suggestions are highly appreciated.. thankyou for the critique
and glad you u liked my poem, thankyou for the applaud too
Nooni -
thankyou soooo much Moon Shadow
i'm flattered... i'm really happy you liked my poem and enjoyed reading it
thankyou so much for the applaud
your comment is highly appreciated
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good
This is a pretty good poem. I hope you like constructive criticism. In the first stanza, I thought you used the word "fire" to much, and instead of "Nature Dragon" I would suggest "Earth Dragon". It just kinda fits nicer (in my opinion, it's your poem, keep it if you like it). One last thing, try to day things in a way that has never been described before. I like the last two lines in each stanza, because I think you did a good job saying things in different ways here. Anyway, this really is a good poem, I like how you structured it. so ya. there's my critique. Cheers!
Super Mo -
Very Imaginative
Wow, vivid imagination used here Nooni,just got used to picturing one type of dragon and you introduce another.very cleverly written,I enjoyed it very much,please accept my well deserved applaude.Take care Moon Shadow. -
thankyou sooo sooo much
i'm really glad you liked my poem.. thankyou for the lovely comment and the applaud
Nooni -
This is a very good poem, it is immaginative and it can create a multitude of pictures in a reader's mind.
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great job
I really liked this piece. It depicts the legends of life so well. Keep writing!! -
thankyou sooo much Mordauk
i really liked your comment, yeah i always liked dragons as mythical creatures not as destructive ones (despite their powers)
I'm glad you liked my poem... wow a book about dragons? thats gonna Kick!!!
Nooni -
thankyou for your comment
i'm really glad you liked my poem and enjoyed reading it
i'll check on it again for the grammatical mistakes.
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Awesome job of depicting the dragons as things of beauty, which is how I've always pictured them. I personally love dragons (am currently writing a book about them) and I love the way you have posed them in this poem. To me dragons are far more interesting as beautiful creatures than creatures of destruction.
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This reads more like a story rather than a poem and there are a few grammatical errors.
Now with that out of the way I'd like to say that I love dragons. Love.
And you did a great job here with your description and lore. Great job!
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thankyou sooo much Koenigsreich
i really liked your comment and i appreciate it very much
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I have always been fascinated with dragons of lore, and not necessarily of the way they can destroy in an instant. I love the way you captured their majesty and silent guard of the Earth.
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thankyou soo much Vera
I really liked your comment and it is highly appreciated... that line "Their scales are sapphire blue and with gills" i know and thought didn't sound very well but i did not know how to rephrase it
thankyou again for your lovely commentary and glad you enjoyed reading my poem
Nooni -
thankyou sooo much Sara for your lovely comment
i'm speechless *hugs*... glad you enjoyed it
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thankyou Spamwitch... take your time commenting
thankyou for the applaud, and i'm really happy you liked the poem... please come again and give me you detailed and Lengthy comment 
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thankyou soo much Shadow...
i'm really glad you liked my poem, thankyou for the lovely comment and the applaud..
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These appear to be the auspicious dragons of Chinese traditions - not the lone, greedy, treasure-guarding Scandinavian-Germanic ones - Fafnir and his ilk...
To take an image like the dragon, which has such negative connotations in the Anglophone tradition, and treat it from the viewpoint of another tradition in which it has very different and positive connotations, is a very challenging task indeed (in fact, I wrote about this in the preface to my most recent book).
You, however, have managed this very effectively...
There are a few passages which, it seems to me could benefit from a little more work (in particular, I find the line
'Their scales are sapphire blue and with gills,' a little clumsy - grammatically it seems to imply that the SCALES possess gills, which is surely not what you meant!)
Overall, though, you have produced a very positive and evocative piece of writing.
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This is a great start to something new. I encourage you to keep writing, I can already tell that this will be a great series of writing that will show readers your talent and potential Take care and keep in touch Sara
P.S Best Wishes in this contest, I hope you win a trophy!
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ok then
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I adore old legends,, I apologize, it's late for me or I would leave a long winded critique, in stead I shall applaud your beautiful work and remind myself to return to give a better comment! I did really like this though.
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Again, a beautifully written piece of work. Well done and I truly enjoy reading your prose!
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I really liked this. It wasn't clear to me that it was about the elements of the earth till I got down toward the middle. I liked how you used each one with a different description and color and even texture for their domain. I always appreciate a writer who can write fantasy and make it seem real and believable. This was a very well written piece with some nice imagery detailed. I hope you do well in this contest. I am impressed.
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thakyou sooo much scentedangel
glad you enjoyed reading it...
it is a pleasure reading your comments
Nooni -
thankyou soo much Music
really glad you enjoye dmy Dragons poem
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I enjoyed reading this, it was very good. Very, very good write and the best of luck in the contest you are in.
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thankyou Marianne... glad you enjoyed it
its my first dragon poem attempt lol
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thankyou Narnia
glad you liked it and enjoyed reading it
thankyou for the lovely comment -
thankx, glad you enjoyed reading it...
i kinda didn't know that there is a dragon for everything
its kinda the elmental dragons... glad you enjoyed it
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Good use of parallelism in this, and imagery is top notch. it's not a subject i've really considered, but i did enjoy reading this
love
Marianne -
Oh, i like how you descibribe the water dragons, very nice poem. great job and keep writting
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interesting. you describe the dragons quiet well, but there is a dragon for everything. shadow, fire, water, wind, earth, cloud, ice, rock, nature, forest, etc. there are so many! but nice exzamples of some dragons. pretty.
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