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The Monster

Letting the desire take over
the monster glares
at the father's daughter.
As the monster has no child,
but the man that the monster use to be,
has a young girl he forgot about.
She's all knowing now,
Heard her hero talk about,
and heard him become the monster.
She sees him only as a monster now,
and the man rode away
Leaving her teary-eyed shadow
gasping, "daddy come back,"
Her scarred hands held out,
his silhouette disappears.

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Written January 18th, 2006

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  • JaysonBaby
    March 28, 2006
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    hey that is cool I have been looking at your page for a while and I think that I have read most of your poems


  • Chelsea Void
    January 22, 2006
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    beautiful and brilliant

    i'm textless.
    that hits the reader tragically. i'm sorry if this is affecting you now.
    but you express the pain and confusion of the situation so easily.
    it's beautiful and choking at the same time, choking in a good way. makes you stop and think and want to somehow make it better, yet keep the beauty in your words.
    great write, keep it up. makes my problems seem insignificant. =P
    you've got a talented future ahead of you.

    -A.I.


  • Reaper of the Heart
    January 22, 2006
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    sad, but I like sad this poem is kool\

  • Ir.muse
    January 18, 2006
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    A verrrrrrrry sad piece.I'm really sorry to hear that.
    Shahrzad


  • ShadyLass
    January 18, 2006
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    Well expressed and full of pain. Great poem.
    ~Amanda~


  • Iksander
    January 18, 2006
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    Well written, very intensly expressed pain. I wish you didn't have that pain too, for pain is crippling in any subjective form it takes.


  • January 18, 2006
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    it sucks that our children have to beg for love


  • Shh-Sues-Writing
    January 18, 2006
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    Awesome!!!

    how intense!! it sent chills up my spine, and in the end when "his silhouette disappears." i felt awful... i know what that's like... wow... great write!

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