(Please do comment and tell me about the form)
Despise me, I am your wretched slave,
Revise not your ways, how you treat me.
Chastise me with your insensate words,
Disguise goodness, so others will not see.
Inflict accusations so I might surrender,
Predict deadly disaster my fortune-teller,
Verdict of your frustration I await to hear,
Evict me from your fruitless life forever.
Author notes
This is a form I have created, and I would like to call it a Lento. (Do bring to my notice if there is any form with this name and rules) It is a short poem written in 2 quatrains (a stanza consisting of 4 lines) with a fixed rhyme scheme where the first word in every line should rhyme with each other and the second and the fourth lines rhyme.
To know more, go to Shadow Poetry: www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html
Written January 18th, 2006
What did you think
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EXCELLENT FORM I MUST TRY THIS STYLE OF POETRY....Novy :f
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thanks Novy. Very soon, or maybe somewhere i would be having another round of contests for the form, and will surely keep you informed. But for now, you can try it. thanks for checking it.
Love and light,
Lencio
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Good for you to create a form! It has its benefits doesn't it?
Great idea!
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Wow!A brilliant poem with brilliant wording and an extrmely well done Lento.You chose a hard word for rhymes and carried it out extremely well.best of luck
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This is, an interesting form, which reminds me of Bob Dylan somehow. The rhyme at the beginning changes the way the mind processes the rhyme. I think one is less aware of the rhyme, however I think if it were sung by someone like Dylan, one would definitely be aware of it.
Thank you for entering the contest.
Blayde
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Damn, now this is something. I couldnt bring myself to write or invite a new form if my life was depending on it. I enjoyed this much, and hope you will keep going with the style. Thank you for the entry.
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Very nicely done.. good form.. Worth a try !
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This reminds me of a write I once composed. Sounds quite angry. I used to be angry, I'm just mellow now. I love the new form by the way. Dari xxx
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Waiter! please bring me the bill
This kind of grows on you, like saziki sauce on the taste buds. -
Grear poet
Hello again, I am especially fond of this poem when it is read aloud. I find your work always shows thought and rhythm, even when bound together with, or without, rhyme. The effect of this poem is strong and the form allows one to untwist the thoughts and feelings in an unexpected way. The changes allow the ear to hear anew the thoughts as the appear, the pauses make a comment all of their own. As always, you penetrate the soul, adding to my knowledge. Thank you *rose Annie
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Wonderful!
Brilliant! It actually took me a moment as well, To see the exact patttern, But Really, I think the beauty of it is that it gives it structure without the repetative feel a lot of them have. Good job. ^.^
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An interesting form, Lento and one worth trying myself. Your poem is great, very amusing and yet serious at the same time. The picture with it is so appropriate, too
I'd really like to enter your contest using this form. I hope I don't miss it when it's posted.
Great job with this one and I wish you good luck in this contest.
Dee
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Powerful to say the least.
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Thank you MMW. I am glad your attention was drawn to this. Lento comes from my first name Lento, and then I rhymed it with a Cento (an existing form)
. I am just about to post a column on the rules and explantion on a Lento. Check this space!. I will also hold a contest on the form, so people can try it out. I have added you to my Favourites list and will keep you posted.
Love and light,
Lencio
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Yay
Very impressive! I suck at writing anything in form, but I still love to learn it and I love to try. May I ask why you choose to call it Lento?
Anyway. Back to the comment.
I really liked this poem. It was unique, not only because of the form you developed. I really loved your choice of vocabulary, as well. You definitely have a knack for rhyme that I could never match.
I definitely think the second quatrain was my favorite.
Keep up the amazing writing. If you come up with anymore forms like this, definitely let me know. I like to learn about them, and I definitely like to try to write with them. I'm working on sestinas now. -sigh- hehe.
Great write! Thanks for sharing it with AP. -
applaud
Well done. I like the poem. -
This is a lovelty new style which U love!!! Well done I enjoyed the poem a lot. I love the rule that says that the 1st and 3rd 1st words have to rhyme. Great rhythm was brought in with thast rule.
Maria xoxoxox -
lol!!! Thanks , and I will be running a contest on it and also have a column syndicated. Check this space!!!
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Very clever Lencio.... coming up with a new form, called LENTO. I think this is wonderful. I have to try that form one day too. Thanks very much. Anna.
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That's a kool idea Lencio, I think I will give it a try myself and see how it comes out. I'll contact ya if I have any questions on it. Great job my friend. I did a new form I made up also. give it a shot. GETS
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it took me only a short few seconds to realize the originality of thinking up such a fun form to invent not to mention its almost like another form(cant think up the form off hand)but only have the rhyming ends switched. Anyway, I simply love the powerhouse emotions felt throughout this piece
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Wow Lencio,this is excellent poem..the form is outstanding..Amazing how you have been so creative coming up with this new form..you should advertise it here in ap somehow..Im sure poets will love it..I love short poems so this was perfect read to me..
the subject matter was great as well hold some anger, sadness but in very elegant way..as usual Lencio you are the best
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Dear Lencio,
Its great to see you create a new form. I like the sound of Lento! Lovely name The form is not hard and one which I'm sure poets would like to try out. How are you planning to spread the word around about this form? It would be good to write a column on this in the Lento Form and get it syndicated as the others have suggested, I think.
I look forward to Lencio's Lento Mania!
Nice poem with good alliteration in L4 and L6.
Best wishes,
Charishma
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I am so glad you have found this outlet its a wonderful distraction and a cleaver design. You are defiantly the smarter twin, after all that fuss about rhyme and you create a rhyming form. Well done
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very annoying
Your use of personal pronouns keep hammering this text, putting the reader on the offensive. Your tone telling others what to do is also annoying. Very effective annoying write.
Dennis :^{ -
Unique
Successful sultry,ironic write a great place to hear truth and vent your hate.There is an S and M. feel to this Poem which is erotic and subtle and imagery is like looking through a crystal ball.Form is unique and clever lending itself perfectly to this Poem.Brilliant my friend.Elizabeth -
Thanks Larry. I would be glad to see your poem in this form. The contest will follow shortly.
Your friend,
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Well I have written it in a Lento form will post it shortly.
I hope you will try out this form.
Hugs,
Lencio -
great job
hello poet friend...I like what you have done here...and I agree with risen sun...well done...also might give the contest a go...larry -
I am really lloking foward to the lento contest. Amazing job, Lencio. Congratulations on creating your own form. Why don't you write a column on how to do the lento form, and have it syndicated.
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Thanks Joyce. Please try out this form, it will be a pleasure to see now what other writers will come out with. I should also be hosting a contest for the same soon.
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I suppose so, thanks for pointing that, I did change it. Please be free to try out this form. I will be shortly hosting a contest for the same.
Lencio -
Standing as I applaud!!!!!
Lencio, Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Now you know how much I like form poetry and I will have to bookmark this till I can get back and copy the instructions. I love it and the poem as well. Another of your great works being shared with all of us here. You never cease to amaze me with your extensive use of vocabulary and the deepness that goes into your works. Golden ink flows from your pen my friend and never let it stop.
This is fantabulous to say the least. I will be giving this form a try for sure. Love and blessings for you my friend, today and always. 
Joyce
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I really liked the form of this, it is quirky and original. The only thing I didn't like is the exclaimation mark at the end. I think that a "." would work much better and be more powerful, as the words themselves were wonderful.
Thank you for sharing this, I'm very tempted to have a go at this style myself because it DEFINITLY needs exploring. Looks a bit hard though...
Love,
Marianne -
lol!!! thats what denunciation is all about eh? Thanks, your comment is much appreciated and "filed"!!!
Lencio -
excellent
great violent verbal form so corrupt and numb yet thoughtful with choosen vocabulary!!! -
really liked it .... could qualify as lyrics of a rock song...(growl)
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Well insensate would be like talking without any feeling, numb, and when you talk like that, it could be very uncomfortable and insulting to the other person, yeah? I hope you like the form, tell me about it.
Lencio -
GOOD
WISE WORDS THOUGH A BIT HARD. WHAT DOES 'INSENSATE' MEAN -
Hey thanks buddy, I hope it catches up on AP soon !!!
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wow, cool poem and a cool form you created here, i like it, i may try it one day. i like the pic that goes with this to, i mean it this is a great poem, keep it flowing
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