aqua trilogy (haiku)
softly murmuring
stream flows from mountain top high
past trees over rocks
flower petals wave
their voices gently sighing
as they bid farewell
stream becomes river
tumbling over rocks and sand
racing to the sea
dee garner
© january 17, 2006
Author notes
You chose water as my poem subject #8
Written January 17th, 2006
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Comments
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I liked reading them in tandem, as a whole poem, not individual haiku for they create a picture of a large field, with a stream, mountains, nature.
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I'm learning, learning
Never seen connecting Haiku poems before
I learn so much from reading you
When you enjoy it, it is not a chore
Reading you is fun and one could never with you be blue
Tiki Cat -
This haiku flows with the gracefulness of a song. The imagery is wonderful, relaxing...I could read it over and over again. Great write! Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you, brok lee
Haiku is fairly easy to write, and I do enjoy reading and writing them. Just a couple of rules regarding traditional Haiku and Senryu ....syllables and content, etc. If you go to www.shadowpoetry.com you'll find lists and rules of the many different forms of poetry including Haiku.
Give some of them a try
Thanks again for your kind comment
Dee
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i liked it even though my uneducated self does'nt understand what a haiku is,i really don't like it when things ryme all the time it's too boring and i feel the need to skip ahead or put it down.haiku sounds interesting.
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Very good haiku! It's one of my favorite types of poem, simply because they are almost always calming.
Thanks for the nice comment!
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This is a beautiful trio of haikus that go well together, it takes me to the peaceful serenity of the outdoors, thank you for sharing, rain75.
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nice
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nature surounds us - we are at its mercy and that can only be a good thing in my mental eyes - hi dee, long time no speak to you, i hope you had a good xmas and new year
(chasing)
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I'm glad you like it, Mary .....and I so much appreciate your read and kind comment. the last stanza is the one I like best also
Dee
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Thank you, Shahrzad I'm glad you enjoyed it. I love writing and reading Haiku and this came to mind for the contest.
And thank you for all your sweet daily messages, you really make my day a grand one
Love and
Mom
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stream becomes river
tumbling over rocks and sand
racing to the sea
Love this one especially. Somehow, I relate personally to the river here; begining small to becoming aggressive and relentless.
~Mary O -
My lovely mom,
This is a wonderful great piece.Love it.
Shahrzad
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Thank you, Freda for your nice comment..you know I apptreciate you reading my work. You mentioned Feng Shui ...I'm very much into that myself, too. And yes, now that I re-read the poem it does remind me of Feng Shui, calming, natural, peaceful yet exuberant with life.
Dee
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This is a wonderful piece. Very soothing and calming. I like how you decided to put the topic of 'water' into a nature form. I wouldn't have thought to do that. Very nice and good luck to you in my contest. <3 Christina
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this is a lovely Haiku trilogy, Dee, sort of Feng Shui, calming and peaceful, yet, depicting the incredible act of snow on the highest mountain peaks melting into a rivulet, then a stream, river and off to fed the ocean...I like the feel of Nature as one with itself, flowers saying goodbye, etc..I thnk you have a winner...hugs freda
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