It doesn't matter how hard I try
People succeed in making me cry
I look away, they come to me
All I want is to be free
They won't leave me alone, they want to fight
I just want to do things right
I tried so hard to be strong
Everything I do turns out wrong
They blame my fear on the tunes I hear
They say depression is a silent wish
They know nothing of this mind of mine
They say everything will turn out fine
Yet I see nothing of this truth
Everything seems so uncouth
I slip away all by myself
To feel again those things I felt
I feel these things inside my head
I hear these things I wish I'd read
In the end I know who has won
In the end I know what has to be done
Author notes
Done and dusted at 00:16 on 26th November 2001. Woo!
Tis about depression and knowing that it's only me who can get myself out of it.
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A contest entry
- Five choices, come check it out! by Karli.
300 points, ended July 13, 2004, 23 entries
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Hmmm, yes. I believe that you should rearrange the last line of your first verse. It should read: 'all I want to be is free'. Does that sound better, yes? All in all, a rather good piece. It is quite old, older than the time I have been acquainted with you.
Your friend,
Kain -
EXPRESSIVE!
This is quite a poem.
Very expressive!
And thanks for your comment on mine;
doesn't surprise me.
My poems don't usually fit in no matter where
I submit them.
But thanks for your honesty.
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Depression is so often hard to deal with and to overcome. I have a son who is Bipolar and to see him in this state and to know I can do nothing to help is painful. Best wishes
Ruth -
i want to commend u on this beautiful poem...i liked the rhyme scheme and the emotion poured out of each word and i can totally relate to this powerful piece ...
kay -
This is good. Very emotional. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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good work...many could possibly relate to this.
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This appears to be a highly emotionally charged work.
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