The CRIMSON liquid
escapes your VEINS
and POURS down your THROAT,
emptying the LIFE from your BODY...
...the consequence this BLADE has caused you to SUFFER.
Your EYES widen
as you SCREAM in AGONY,
wishing the PAIN in your SOUL
...and your neck...
would DISAPPEAR.
You lose contact with your
--(h3aD
and your
--(heAR7...
As i stutteR:
"You were my one, true FR1END."
Author notes
I am psy...cho...
lol.
Written January 17th, 2006
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That makes sense, thanks.
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The neck is being cut with the knife. :-D
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I liked this, especially how it has some words in all capitals, those must be the important words. it sounds a lot like there is a vampire in it from the line of " pain in your soul and neck" but, is that way off?
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Wow.... This is AMAZING. seriously.
PSYCHOS ROCK!!
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Thanks. I'll be sure to return the favor!
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Wow this is a very powerful poem. The ending was well written just as the poem was great write you have really interested me. I cant wait to read some of your other work.
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I am the person and I am describing the "reader". It's all kind of..."2nd" person. It's from my point of view, but still not quite 1st person.
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Cool!
Cool! I like the weird spellings of head and heart. ^_^ Hmm... could the Crimson Liquid be Mercury? Does it really hurt to drink it? But I don't get it... It changes views... It goes from 3rd to 1st person...
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