You're not worth the tears I've shed,
So why do you think I would want to be dead?
Not over you, you're not worth it,
I'm just tired off all this sh!t
All this drama in my life,
has made me depend on a knife,
seeing that blood makes it all so surreal,
and then my problems aren't such a big deal.
I love you,
you know it's true,
but I'd be better off without you,
I'm sorry for all the stupid things I do
So I'll end this now, move on with your life
You get your drugs, and I'll get my knife
Just leave a little scar
So I'll remember who you are
And how none of this made sense to me,
but I hope you end up happy,
Because when you're gone,
I'm moving on,
starting over with someone new...
Someone who will love me as much as I love you...
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Just a poem.....
Written January 17th, 2006
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this is very powerful. you wrote straight from the heart and it shows. i love the way you describe everything in the poem from the knife to having him leave a little scar it truly is wonderful. this is emotional and powerful and just a wonderful write!
ash -
Great Write
Great Write...i really liked this and i could feel so much emotion...the way you said you have your knife and you can see the blood...that just showed me an image of an arm with a pointed knife to the wrist with blood dripping from it...great imagery and emotion put in this poem...awesome write
Amanda Rhea -
Excellent
This a great poem filled with emotion. I can feel the pain because I'm going through something similar right now (simalar, though not the same). I love someone and I thought they loved me but I don't think they do anymore because her parents made her break up with me, and now, she claims she "just ... got over me" to her friends who tell me what she says.
I really like the lines: "Just leave a little scar
So I'll remember who you are" and
"starting over with someone new...
Someone who will love me as much as I love you..."
I think you are an excellent writer and I love the rhyme and all the emotion, especially since I know what that kind of pain feels like. Anyway, great write. Keep up the good work. -
Such a tragic poem. To love someone that cannot adequately return the feeling. It is even more tragic that, possibly without the drugs, there might be a chance.
I like the emotion and thought that went into writing this. You have such a variety of words and you use them to such an effect. I do like the first part where you said;
"You're not worth the tears I've shed
So why do you think I would want to be dead
Not over you, you're not worth it."
Such a defiant stand against the crap that they put you through. I love that.
You also ended it on an emotionally strong point as well. Sometimes it is better to just let people go that will drag us down. -
What a positive poem. Your opening lines
You're not worth the tears I've shed,
So why do you think I would want to be dead?
Not over you, you're not worth it,
are very positive and strong and you continue this through the entire poem. If this is you, go for it.
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GrEaT!!
so this is a really good write. it shows many different aspects of breakup or even when someone dies...thanks for the write!!
<333 Sirena -
fantabulous
how come i havent commented this one yet i love it and you know it lol i like your rhyming and the flow so let your heart show the glow HA lol me rhyming not a good thing but i try. its a great write you should keep it up maybe one day it will have some use and be good luck. -
awwww that's a good little poem. It shows so much feeling and it rhymes..but r ya'll like breakin up or summin? well i hope everything works out for the best and i'll talk to you later
bye chica
~*~Kristen~*~
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