It was you
that left me standing
in the rain
as my eyes filled
with tears...
It was you
that haunts my
very soul
leaving me wanting
to rip my eyes out
It was me
watching you
walk away...
It was you
that didn't keep the faith
our faith that
held us together
It was you
that was the weakest
link in the chain
called our love
It was me
watching you
walk away...
It was you
who buckled under
the pressure of
others surrounding
It was you
that crushed my
heart, leaving bloody
shards behind
It was me
watching you
walk away...
Author notes
*NO, MY MUSE IS NOT BACK...I RAN ACROSS THIS WHILE GOING THROUGH MY DOCUMENTS. NOT MY USUAL STUFF, BUT YOU KNOW HOW IT GOES...
Written January 17th, 2006
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great pinpointing of 'you' and 'him'. this is really really good. By the way, when I got my AP account a few years ago, you were the first one to ever comment me. I'd like to say thanks.
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Awesome!! I can't even begin to say how many times "I've been there, done that"... you've mastered the feeling in this one... All she could do was watch him walk away. You just get so darn tired of trying like hell to make a relationship work...and in the end, It falls apart. Awesome write. I really like how you switched from him to her...it was a nice break in between. Bring your muse back!!
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I have already commented on this but i have to say that i read it again and i can so much relate to this poem that its crazy i love your work and i always have great write!
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awesome
now willow also at one time known as willow625 its been a long time sence i have heard from you and this poem like you have said is very unyou like but we all have our reasons for righting and this poem seems to have deep emotion and feeling of betrale and yes i still cant spell for crap lol well nice to read some of your stuff see ya later -
sad but good
its beautiful anyway even if your muse is on vacation. i miss you and i loved this poem enjoy all things -
I love this write great job i like it alot
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Oh dear Sally - this rips the heart out. It is so very sad - two side to every situation which you have portrayed here - the blame not belonging to one pereson.
A tear-jerker.
Von
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How I have missed you!!!!!!!!!! You finally make an appearance and I missed you!
I haven't been on too much so I have missed a lot lately!!! This is such a sad yet beautiful write. It gives such a haunting image of such a broke spirit. No matter when it was written, your talent is always evident my friend!! Hope all is well with you!!!!!!!! Karen
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I came on your author's page again to tell you that I miss you, see this new poem and then remember I got an IM of you the other day, but then I had to go in a hurry so I totally forgot about it
It's simply a beautiful poem, in a subject we're not really used to see from you - but then again, it's always nice to see true poets like you stepping out of the comfortable zone
very well done sweety
I miss you
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I think everyone that has ever had their heart broken can relate to this poem. Excellent work
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excellent~
Oh sis
I loved it...but it's so hauntingly sad...
I liked the repetion of It Was You...
No it's not your usual...but then again its just as good or better....
More please...so glad to see to here and that you have posted something...
Yeah my sis is back...and loved this hauntingly sad poem
Love n hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
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this was bloody well fantastic...you really have let your pain and anger come through. I think you still have alot to work through but this was a grand start. yuou have never been far from my thoughts. I hope all gets better for you
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Good job ;D it was an awsome poem
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