I see love in the perfect face.
My son's face.
Author notes
This was originally written for a contest where you had to sum up the perfect face as briefly as possible - what more can I say!
Written January 16th, 2006
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short, sweet and the most sentimental i have seen in a while. thank you for reminding me of my love for my children tonight. viyanna langager
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i love this, a mothers love is one of the strongest forces out there. This is an amazing and heart felt piece, and your childrens facesare always the most perfect faces out there.
Great poem
Andrea -
SHORT BUT TRUE AND TO THE POINT,WELL DONE
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A mother's unwavering love! Beautiful and powerful with just 2 lines!
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A beautiful piece
This comes across as truly heartfelt, you needed no more words...~Lilac~ -
Anyone would love this entry after reading it. Very sweet and sincere. Best wishes in the contest~vj
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To the pure of heart (and eyes) all is pure. It takes perfection to see perfection. Just as a knife cannot cut itself, a sick mind cannot heal itself, and a warrior cannot defeat oneself without also winning...irony would have it that the shortest poems are the longest and are unaware of their shortness. Hence...that's why others are here. Hugging oneself is missing something essential. LOL! and so the metaphors live on, but a picture is forever.
Peace Through Love,
Timothy Cameron -
Such few words to express the love and admiration for a child!!
very emotional words...Great job!!! good luck
Edited on Jan 20, 9:37 p.m. because 'spelling'. -
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ohhhh! This is perfect. If you changed anything it would be violation: it's beautiful as the simplicity you've presented. Lovely!! -
ahh yes... the beauty of a child.. no matter how old ..
cleverly done
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How right you are I feel the same way about my children the are perfect great on this keep it up
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perfection is indeed some things are rare in life.. good choice of words.. good luck..Linda
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Isn't it funny sometimes when the shortest amount of words say so much? What a lovely thought!
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Now I see what you mean by saying you have your won style, and I can tell you, you'd be good at Haiku. Great job here and very heart fulfilling, heart warming write, and to see the perfect love in your child's face, which IS true!!!
Well done,
Lencio
PS:
Thanks for commenting on my Column on Lento, would love to see you trying out the form.
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Beautiful . There is nothing more beautiful then our childs face.
Loretta -
fab
what a lovely thing to write,you said it all.well done -
this is so short, but totally sweet... it gets the point across, and there IS nothing more beaitiful than a child's face... good luck in you contest!
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I think all our kids have perfect faces, and even if they're not, we love them anyways. Liked this short version.
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Oh, my! So few words, and yet you say so much! I have some perfect faces of my own, and I treasure them all. This is so touching from one mother to another. Hugs, Patricia ♥
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A perfect write, thought that is taken to the heart..Good luck in the contest..Brenda
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Rather than poetry, this sounds like one of those things you say or write and people quote for a long time. This is so very simple and doesn't really seem to hold poetic value. You love your son and, as experience shows most of us, love makes the perfect face and the perfect person. After all, what is poetry, if it isn't included in that feeling of satisfaction you have when you can write such thing? What feeling can be better than that of those who will pass by this and relate to it, and whose days may be a little brighter thanks to reading this? I think that is poetry. It can be polished to sound way better, of course, but the feeling that you've conveyed in this needs no words, in fact. It is like poetry itself.
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Wow, thats weird, for some reason, I enjoyed this very simple two lined piece, you werent trying to go overbored, you didnt described a lovers face like so many other, oh wow, I have say that this so simple, but its powerful in its own respects, wonderful job!!
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