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The Abyss

You gaze upon me with your pitfull pity eyes;
In the mirrors the shades question the flesh
as the book devours the prying reader;
Bleakness surrounds your mind and soul alike:
the infinite is the illusion provoked by my dark!
The infinite you feel crawling inside your womb
as you gaze at me and ask ? Am I the Abyss ?
The Abyss utters back from his void with his echo:
Who am I ? I am you when your gaze meets mine.

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Every rose has it's thorn
Written January 16th, 2006

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  • Joao Camilo
    January 30, 2006
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    *nods* Nietzsche is not among my favorite philosophers but he some great momments in his dark sight


  • Maatkara gold member
    January 30, 2006
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    Oh yes, of course that is fine as it is intended, I just wanted to be sure it was.

    I think I attributed the Nietzsche quote I was thinking of to the wrong one, it is from his later work I believe, "Beyond Good and Evil":

    "He who fights with monsters should look to it that he himself does not become a monster. And when you gaze long into an abyss the abyss also gazes into you."
    - Friedrich Nietzsche (1844-1900)

    ~Gen

  • Joao Camilo
    January 30, 2006
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    Thanks for the correction. Yes, the Nietsche reference is not accidental
    Now, let me ask about your suggestion in the "his void with his echo" - Would it still need correction if my intention is to highlight that it is the abyss' void and echo and not "My" echo and void as they all exist at that point in the poem ?

  • Maatkara gold member
    January 30, 2006
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    This is very good, Joao! Reminds me of parts of Nietzsche's "Thus Spake Zarathustra".

    Just a few fixes in the syntax:

    'as you gaze at me and ask ? Am I the Abyss ?
    The Abyss utters back from his void with this echo:' (or, '..from the void with his echo')

    ~Gen


  • Trial and Error
    January 22, 2006
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    Hey! I like that song

  • Joao Camilo
    January 17, 2006
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    I know My headbangers years are in the 80's and I almost said "Poison, nooooooooooooooooo. What is next, Skid Row ?"


  • Trial and Error
    January 17, 2006
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    Oh, and the quote comes from the song "Every Rose Has It's Thorn" by Poison, an '80's metal band.

  • Trial and Error
    January 17, 2006
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    The quoting was for my contest. I made it mandatory to make sure people read the rules, lol.
    Great poem Joao, thankies for entering Good luck!
    </3Desires (Kat)

  • Joao Camilo
    January 17, 2006
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    oh, do you reckon the quoting, Massy ?


  • Vernal Bloom
    January 16, 2006
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    ahsant

    Joao I see you added qoatation to your poetry,too
    This piece was a lovely describtion of who you are..
    Thanks for sharing this with us

    ~Massy~

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