All My Own
His eyes as brown as dark chocolate
His hair as soft as fleece
His skin milky white and smooth
His body perfect in every way.
His touch as gentle as a lamb
His kiss as sweet as candy
His look passionate; stopping me in my tracks
His attention always on me.
His laugh as refreshing as a spring
His voice as deep as the grand canyon
His smile bright and welcoming
His personality wonderful.
His love endless
His kindness unwavering
His loyalty always true
His selflessness apparent in his every move.
A man like no other
A man I will always love
A man who is perfect and all my own.
A man I already have.
Author notes
comment as critical as possible. be honest and brutal please. this is a poem for my fiance and i want to make sure he understands how wonderful he is. jeff if you read this, i love you so much.
~Ash~
Written January 16th, 2006
A contest entry
- almost whatever you want to write about by Deadly Shame.
350 points, ended January 29, 2006, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Good for you for finding someone to fit this lofty bill! I know that he must be a truly lucky man to be on the receiving end of such love you seem to have for him.
Great job on writing such a descriptive piece. Kudos to you. -
thank you very much for the kind comment. jeff loves this poem and i am glad you liked it as well.
ash -
Jeff is one lucky guy! That poem was A-W-E-S-O-M-E!!!
I just adore the imagery the poem evokes, as well as the strong emotions and feelings you included in describing Jeff. That last stanza is my fav one- i think it ties up the whole poem nicely and is a really appropriate ending to such a lovely poem. Beautiful. Best wishes to you and Jeff
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Jeff is one lucky guy! That poem was A-W-E-S-O-M-E!!!
I just adore the imagery the poem evokes, as well as the strong emotions and feelings you included in describing Jeff. That last stanza is my fav one- i think it ties up the whole poem nicely and is a really appropriate ending to such a lovely poem. Beautiful. Best wishes to you and Jeff
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Jeff is one lucky guy! That poem was A-W-E-S-O-M-E!!!
I just adore the imagery the poem evokes, as well as the strong emotions and feelings you included in describing Jeff. That last stanza is my fav one- i think it ties up the whole poem nicely and is a really appropriate ending to such a lovely poem. Beautiful. Best wishes to you and Jeff
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Jeff is one lucky guy! That poem was A-W-E-S-O-M-E!!!
I just adore the imagery the poem evokes, as well as the strong emotions and feelings you included in describing Jeff. That last stanza is my fav one- i think it ties up the whole poem nicely and is a really appropriate ending to such a lovely poem. Beautiful. Best wishes to you and Jeff
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Sounds like you have the perfect man. I hope you show him this, guys like to act tough but deep down they are all soft and like to be loved just like we do
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thank you very much!
ash -
Wahoooooooooooooo for you!
Lovely tribute to a wonderful man in your life. Kimberly G.
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Well if he can't tell how you feel after this he must be blind.
I think you expressed your feelings well. This was easy to read and understand. Well done.
Frightendove,
ps. Thanks for reading and commenting on my work. I do appreciate it. -
excellent
wow. another great peom by you!
this one is So sweet. i wishi had a guy like that. i'm so glad that he found you and you found him thouhg. sounds like you've had some hard times (i read your bio) and that you need someone like that. if you ever wanna talk i'm here. and also, the world is not just about winning. i never win anything but i keep going becuase it doesn't matter i you win or lose, its how you played the game. i'm totally off topic lol but ANYWAY this is a great write and i wouldn't change a thing. i hope he loves it as much as i did!! good job and don't give up!
Kat
PS thanks again for commenting on mine!!!!!!!!! -
amzing
This poem is amzing. I once loved a guy just like that. its amzing the emtion and words that make this poem -
Very Good
Very interesting, Like the cadence of the poem.
Rick -
Nice writing, and I Hope he loved it. Good luck.
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He will love it, there is no mistaking your feelings for him I can tell it comes from your soul
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thank you for your kind words...
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This is so sweet and straiight from the heart, a well written poem keep up the good work!
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Beautiful write .Yes wonderful words for that special someone.
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actually he likes poetry and he likes when i give him a poem.
~Ash~ -
Okay
I realize you wrote this for your boyfriend, and the thought does count, but don't be surprised if he fakes his "Oh, thank you" or whatever he says. Guys don't think much of poetry being... you know, given to them. We have different values. -
good poem
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thank you i edited it real fast to have four lines in every verse i hope it flows better. thanx again.
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i love the imegry and the emotoin you pore into this, however i don't think it flows quite right with three lines though. good luck, i hope he loves it
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