I never asked for this weight on my back
Reaching for help before my shoulder bones crack
It's times like these when I need you the most
But when I reach out I reach out to a ghost
So many directions with nowhere to turn
Set me alight and just watch me burn
Being a soldier without reason to fight
Hearing you laugh as you set me alight
It's painful memories that don't fade so fast
When all that I love is pushed into my past
Holding on to what never existed
What did I say? My words have been twisted
Darkness she is everywhere
Caressing my face and pulling my hair
My hands are bruised and my legs seem broken
My lips will bleed as your name is spoken
Icy silence grips my skin
Sucking out the warmth within
Return to me, my heart, you must
Before all the remains is ashes and dust.
Author notes
After writing this I read it and felt scared that I actually felt that way!!
Written January 16th, 2006
A contest entry
- Heartache/Lost love PW! by Brit-Girl.
400 points, ended August 2, 2008, 35 entries
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favorite line. Don't be scared of your writing. Embrace the darkest thoughts. for thats where true poetry comes from.
"My hands are bruised and my legs seem broken
My lips will bleed as your name is spoken" -
I like how you described the darkness, Very well written. You can feel the amount the person misses smeone in this. Good Job.
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this is an interesting write, I generally don't like rhyming couplets, however this is nice.
thank you for your entry!
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You have portraied your lover leaving in a very nice way. I especially liked that way you have ended the poem. It shows that you really did like the person concerned. But as life goes on so must you. Best of luck and thanks for entering.
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woow, this poem is so powerfull!! Its very Wonderfull!!
I really like it!! good luck and keep going.
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Brilliant
Again...I LOVE IT! "Darkness she is everywhere
Caressing my face and pulling my hair" ...those words sent a bit of a chill up my spine...as well as your last lines..."Return to me, my heart, you must
Before all the remains is ashes and dust." wonderful!
I bow to you!
A.
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Nice.
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very good, very powerful. i like the effect
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