She's staring out her window
with no expression in her eyes
shes scared of whats hidden below
her labyrinth of lies
the lies that seem to turn and twist
feeling the welts upon her wrist
the temptation that she could not resist
once
twice
3 times more
She makes sure she locks the door
dwelling on broken dreams
her heart ripped at the seams
She's staring out here window
with no sparkle in her eye
her feelings overwhelm her
making her want to die
once
twice
3 times more
shes watching her blood seep to the floor
she wills her pain to hurt no more
looking in the mirror
no ones around to hear her plea
with every cut the answer get clearer, and clearer
once
twice
3 times more
she staring out her window
with no expression on her face
silently asking HIM to remove her from this place
why did she hurt so bad?
it's the kind of hurt that makes you sad
she's feeling what no one else has
she's staring out her window
without a thought in her head
her only chances of living is to be dead
once...
twice...
3 times more...
her razor drops to the floor
while her broken heart beats no more...
Author notes
i personally think that this is my best but who knows you know....
so... how was it??
Written January 16th, 2006
A contest entry
- Give Me Your Personal Best (Prewrites Allowed) by aGent Lemon.
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What did you think
Comments
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it was ok i like the rhyming but im not a fan of the poems with cutting
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This is really good. The rhyming is fantastic. Good work. Thanks for entering my contest, and I wish you much luck.
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I think that this poem is ok. It isn't one that made me speechless, but still a solid, well written poem. My favorite part was the beginning; the first four or five lines. Thanks so much for your entry and good luck!
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I'm not sure I am a fan of all these cutting poems, not to say this wasn't a fine job but the topic is so very overdone these days.... well done though
Thank you for taking the time to enter your favourite prewrite in this contest, I wish you the very best of luck
Karen -
wanted attention
i think this poem is deep but this seems like its saying o im gonna cut my wrists maybe illl get some attention..but its a good write...hey im being honest!!!
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i am glad that you were honest but this was written when i was seriously depressed but i like it because there is so much more i just dont know how to get in into words....
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Emotionally charged piece. It's sad to see anyone self harm. I hope that by writing out your feelings, it helps to relieve some of the pain. Well written work. Thanks for your entry!
~Lori -
Very Well Written
Thank you very much for entering this contest. I should be able to add much more of a comment on this later on since there are so many other submissions. -
awesome!!
wow this poem is awesome it describes me lol,i love it and i think u should make writing poetry a proffession and maybe even putting all ur poems into a book! -
wow...
I... completely understand everything in this poem because that's exactly how I feel... I LOVE it... -
i think its good i guess, since ur teh only one.
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your a natural i wish i had your skills i loved it
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Wow! This is great! You have amazing talent!
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