Broken into poetry to yearn for a cure,
The silent cries from the empty chamber,
Breaking into the core the tear does escape,
Falling, as it declares its re-birth on the page.
Fragments of skin settles under my fingernails,
My head burns as my mother comes forth to kiss me,
Love and happiness are toxin towards this shell,
My heart forgot to love, I can't remember what it means.
My wings, once enlaced with love and affection,
Forsaken love causes my wings to burn to ash,
Looking over my shoulder with my neck of lovebites,
I finally witness that I am no one... To everyone...
Author notes
Sorry for a really bad worded poem. Suffering from severe writer's block.
Written January 16th, 2006
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I remember you having much better pieces but the best way to defeat writers block is just to keep trying explaining my return to AllPoetry. Nonetheless, I did like the subject matter of this piece but with some revisions and reconstruction you can have a terrific poem here. Just concentrate on the meaning of your poem... For instance, Beginning and Ending and then redevelop a middle that bridges both to increase the dramatics and emotion of this piece. I love it now but it has a lot more potential. It's great to see you back though
Alex
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Wow great poem destiny, really sad, but those are the best kind, writer block my ass!
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Le sigh. Such a sad sad poem. I thought it was pretty eloquent, myself. *Shrugs* But I'm no critic, either. Lol...awesome write, my dear!
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Awww...!! Fan koo Kattfeesh! *starts to sing* "Kattfeesh..! She has 800 childreeeen!"
and Im sorry I havent bin keepin up with 'popular demand' :s but I cant write anymore.. 
ah well, I tried! 
Hope ur keepin well little miss poetina! 
Love and hugs, Gemz xxxx -
Righty, time for a proper comment yes, I like this poem, as I do with all of your others lol. It's short, but it's still really good. Don't say it's badly worded, because I think you have some really good wording here. I'd have to say the second stanza is definitely my favourite, not sure why, maybe it just creates a clear picture in my mind. All in all, I think it's a great poem, so stop having a downer on your incredible talent, or else I shall spank ye.
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Naaaah writer's block? Pft, it's fine
and about time you wrote another poem too! 
(Sorry can't write much at the mo, teacher's being a nag lol. I'll give a proper comment laterz). Hope you're doing well 
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