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thursday

Melancholy
and drastic. Unknowing
of what will come
to pass, I go
with it. Treading
slightly with my
pointed toes, I will
follow in the steps
of others,
careful of the outline.
Making sure I don't
disturb it with
my own.

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Written January 15th, 2006

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  • butterflyinflight
    January 16, 2006
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    I agree with anne. This is sad.

    I like the combination of "Melancholy/and drastic." Just a fresh word combination, I think. And this is striking:

    "careful of the outline.
    Making sure I don't
    disturb it with
    my own."

    Nice to see you posting, Roxanne!

    Ruth

  • anne
    January 16, 2006
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    oh this is sad. like head to soles sad.