you touched my heart
it burnt
i cried away my pain
alone in my bedroom
you looked into my soul
and scared my life
we walked tougher
out in the gardens
lost in the love of forever
tears turned to streams
streams turned to rivers
rivers turned to oceans
that brought sorrow to our life's
you touched my life
and i freaked
so scared to love
your touch
Author notes
THIS IS UNFINISHED WORK!
Written January 15th, 2006
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Beautiful poetry!
That was a great poem! It wasn't what you wanted to say? If not just re-read it and put what you feel you left out in the same form you have already written! But I think that it was really good "DARKNESS"!
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This is pretty well written for an unfinished piece of work, I loved it, I think you did an amazing job on this one. Awesome awesome. You are a talented writer.
and ya the whole love thing can be really really scary, but when it's right, it's amazing. God bless ya and lotz of love lotz of love.
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A+++
wow! for an unfinished work... this was pretty damn good!!!! i haven't read anything of yours in a long time!!! but this was sooo good that i need to read more of your stuff! lol. this poem just stirred up soooo bad old feelings that i had for this one guy. he was the only person that i ever loved!!! this was a wonderful poem. it was full of emotion and it painted such a vivid picture of two love birds walking together!!! sweetness
-cait!
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