So walk away, and leave me here.
Broken hearted and shamed of my foolishness.
Walk away to where you can be someone else,
and I'm not the only one who loved you.
And when you come back,
every being within me turns black
as I look at your guilty face.
You infiltrate me.
You fill me with angst and hate.
You seep through my pores and make me cringe.
You are the person I will never become,
and I hate what you have done to my innocent heart.
And when you come back, don't offer me friendship and advice. Don't ask me to fix everything like I did. That was a long time ago, and I've grown. And don't you dare call on me and think of me as yours, because you left me while I was drowning. Screaming and sinking slowly in feelings I couldn't understand.
I know it may be wrong to hate.
I wish I wasn't like this.
I wish I could forget.
I know it may be wrong to hate, so I don't.
I loathe. I can't stand your voice.
I am repulsed by everything you do.
Walk away and leave me here.
Walk somewhere far...
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I hate it when they come back.
Written January 15th, 2006
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Thanks Abigail!
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It's never about them...they don't have that power. It's about how we feel about what they did. They don't pay rent in my head and therefore...I serve them an Eviction Notice. LOL! Kinda what I figured you are working on...but yours is in the form of a poem.
Some people (few and far between, I like to believe) are just plain evil. They will destroy us if they can. If Satan can destroy you through (whomever) he will. Don't let him.
Love you enemies...but don't cast your pearls before swine, either.
Prayers going out for you, sister.
Peace Through Love,
Timotheos -
i looooovvveeee you!!! you never needed him...and don't let him creep back because he's a friggin' d-bag. jamie did a good job on critiquing it, so im' not going to...besides, i wouldn't be able to come up with anything like that anyway, i thought it was great!!! i love you sooooo much!!!! i loved how you just spilled your heart out about him...it makes me mad thinking about how much he hurt you. good job!! Jess
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Okay, I believe your last words were "be harsh." Of course I can't be too harsh, one for the content of this, two because I love you, and three beause it was really good. But I'm me and I always have opinions so here it goes:
The last line (aparently I'm starting at the end) wasn't.. great. The last two I guess. Too cliche. Plus, they didn't sum it up like I wanted them to do.
Can we say hypocritical? You go on and on (beautifull, I might add) about what a jerk he is, (I love this part: because you left me while i was drowning. Screaming and sinking slowly in feelings i couldn't understand.)
But then you go and let down your guard (be strong!) and throw it this, "oh I'm so sorry" crap. Do you really want to be able to forgive him? Are you really sorry? It seems more... raw, for lack of a better word, if you leave it as "You screwed me over, dork. The end."
Um, i's are not doing it for me. You've got such a formal piece going on here, and them I think the i's ruin it.
Okay. Mostly, I loved this. You just dug it up, and were so honest, that I wanted to be like - Oh, hunny... - the whole time. I'm sorry you had to go through this, but don't dwell on it. It's going to be okay. -
YAY ABBIE!!! I don't even have to read this whole thing and I know it's awesome.. I'm SOOOOOOOOOOO proud of you.. next time he comes to something UNINVITIED I might just kick him in the junk... okay, now I'm gonna go read the whole thing...
I LOVE THIS ABBIE!! you couldn't have written a better poem... oooo.. it's sooo good... uhh.. anywho.. I LOVE IT!!! sooo much.. and I love you too!! just come with me and be my lover!! lol.. at least when he's around.. I LOVE YOU!!!
~Lezli
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