The moon appeared whole that night,
at rest, deep within your eyes,
unsure am I of the heavens now,
‘though musings of you stay.
Our lips became acquainted once,
fervour was in abundance,
the season’s phase unrecalled,
‘though musings of you stay.
Honeybee tended to timid rose,
I, in your snug embrace,
winter winds almost forgotten,
‘though musings of you stay.
Joyous faces on a frozen lake,
turn sour with pencilled lines,
nor are you, my love, faultless,
‘though musings of you stay.
Author notes
Written January 15th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Drown me with romance! by The Vulture.
540 points, ended February 1, 2007, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
1 - 10 of 10
-
light and lovely
the poem is not quite intense as many other poems in my contest but it has much voice indeed. I love the style and the lightness of this poem so great job.
Thanks for entering my contest. -
thanks for entering this!
-
Are you kidding me?!?
This poem was amazing.
wow...you people are making this a hard contest to judge.lol.
Thanks so much for entering!
Much love, pain,
Jess
-
It's because though is short for Although.
Thanks for the comment. -
I really don't get the apostrophe in front of 'Though'. Other than that I thought it was a lovely piece. It could be stronger but I really have no suggestions on how to make it that way. Some pieces are fine the way they are but of course could be improved.
A nice piece that you have written here.
-
Thank you very much Lies Of Lust. I really appreciate your lovely comment.
Silverscent. -
This was a beautiful poem. I loved the flow of the words. It painted a pretty picture. I could feel your love flowing through in the lines. A very rare writer who can do that! Thank you for entering my contest!
-
Our lips became acquainted once
Fervour was in abundance
i absolutely lovedddd these lines....it was so simple yet effective. very very well written poem, i can actually feel the true love in each line...it touched me for sure!!
well done and good luck in the contest!!
-
I'll take that as a compliment, I think. Thanks for reading.
-
I was going to make a good comment, but something just gave me a shock and I didn't take much of the poem in, it seems like a very good one though! I'll applaud in anyway
Adding your comment:
1 - 10 of 10
4 old applause
