Can you here my heart beloved
cause it calls out for you and you alone.
You had left me so long ago but I still love you the same if not more.
I know He loves all
but I find myself feeling jealous.
Why should He have you why I can not?
I miss you so much
I miss your embrace
your laughter
and that cute smile on your face.
Yet I can not have you.
I miss you something terribly every single day
but I know you can not come back.
With Him you will forever stay.
I miss you my sweet child and I wish you could have stayed
with me for longer if maybe just another day
but I know you are with Him
and forever is your stay.
Someday I will come to him too
please tell me I too can come and stay.
Author notes
Umm I don't know what form I used...do I get Dq'ed. Well I hope you like.
Written January 15th, 2006
A contest entry
- Be Free! by Illiterate Iguana.
300 points, ended March 22, 2006, 86 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Whoa I didn't know that either. SWEET! I am now at school and on the computer......awesome. THey can't keep me away. I am invincible.....or at least til my grades come home.
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nice Jess...
WOW You have got 105 views on this poem.. 106 including me! WOW!!!
I didn't knmow you were soo popular!!!
Keep on writing Jess.
Nooni
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This poem reads rather well, an interesting point of view to I'm glad it wasn't as the title suggests another brake up poem as they are slowly driving me mad. Was an good read with a good flow explaining an emotion that I have never felt but think I know know some how the feeling . I interpreted you are talking to your daughter who is heaven with god. Sorry if I am so totally wrong. A nice read tis a lovely poem.
Illiterate Iguana
P.S no your not disqualified as you have not used a form.
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This was an amazing poem, a truly great poem, Please keep up the great work!
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Very emotional, but beautiful. Great write.
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Nicely written.
Emotional.
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Awwww this really tore at my heart! Very poignant piece that is tenderly and beautifully written! Thank you very much for sharing!
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How very beautifully and wonderfully written this is! Wonderful sharing of emotions; much enjoyed!
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Well written, sharing emotions and feelings of grief at the loss of a child with us readers. Curious - Someday I will come to Him too, rather than for him?
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A real heart-felt poem...and sad...but,it was a real good write
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Loosing a child is hard. I do not know what you have been through but a good friend has. I am terribly sorry for the loss. you wrote it so beautifully. amazing work.
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Beautifully sad and heartbreaking. I can feel the loss for the loved one but near the end a bit of comfort knowing that one day we will be together again. You really outdid yourself on this. A wonderful piece to be proud of. Thank you for sharing, I applaud you!
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great poem...wow brought tears to my eyes
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Beautifully and delicately written
It is a strange way our language works really, to say that this poem is beautifully written about such a tragic event. This has been delicately and compassionately written with very deep emotions and it conveys your acceptance of such a dramatic act in your life. It is so sad and yet beautiful how you have painted this picture so vividly wiyh simple words of grief. -
Heartbrakingly beautiful. You've conveyed a very powerful love with your words here.
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awwwwww this is cute but pulls at the strings of my heart.. great emotion portrayed but very sad.. like the honesty and true feelings, relatabel in some ways, ur style is original, so well done, thx for shring, well done, x x
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Sad,.... Good read
Great poem, glad this one was promoted, or I might have missed it. Very sad, but at the same time, with hope. I think alot of ppl can relate to this one, we have all experienced some kind of loss in our lives. I am sorry for your loss, & your pain. This was very well written, the layout of it is superb. You did a great job here. I have a child in heaven, just keep the hope that you will meet again. again, so sorry for your pain. Still, a good write.
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This is a heart-wrenching write so filled with raw emotion. I feel your loss and I know that no words will ease the pain you are enduring. You will be reunited and, until then, your loved one will forever be with you in your heart and memories. Believe that they are watching you from a better place and can hear your words. It's comforting to speak to those that we have lost when we believe that they hear all. My heart goes out to you and I wish you happiness and comfort. Keep writing...
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Wow, beautiful work. This is indeed lovely as previously stated above. You have a hell of talents. I admire wonderful work. Keep up the good work. You have a bless day
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these are such beautigul words from such sorrow. you did a tremendous job on this write. thank you for sharing your talent with me. this one hit home with me. viyanna
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This is really lovely, very well written and a sad message that reaches right out into your heart while you read. Loss is something that’s so hard to deal with – you feel it every day and it seems like the heartache will never ease. You wrote about a few different types of emotions in your poem, too. Great writing and a powerful, deep message...Thankyou for entering!
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very nice poem. You might like my "Breaking Up" it is sad when things don't go as planned and you end up apart.
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Very sad. I couldn't imagine loosing a child. It seems like it'd be the worst experience in the world, especially for the woman.
You have done an excellent job here. Wonderful write from the point of veiw of someone in deep pain. Awsome job. Keep it up.
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Great with emotional
This is a great poem and you gave out alot of emotion. This poem contains alot of deep feeling! keep up the good work! -
WOW!
They say that losing a child is the worst pain a person can ever endure. I can not even begin to imagine how someone would carry on after that.
You captured the feelings so genuinely, as if it was written about you.
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great
beautiful and heartbreaking. It is awesome that you have found the ability to express these emotions in a way that is positive. The added bonus of sharing it with all of us here speaks volumes about the kind of heart you have. I am with you in spirit. keep those who carry and lift you around closest. best of wishes. good luck. peace always in all things. -
I'm sorry to have read this, but glad at the same time. It good to see your excepting it. Although I could not imagine the pain of loss you may be experincing, I will always try my best to understand the pain one may experince during this. This is a great poem
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i can't write long im gonna cry all over the keyboard so sorry for the loss this is a very emotional peace u have a good way of putting words 2gether 2 stir up emotion great write i enjoyed reading it but at the same time do not b/c of the topic
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Its a great poem, very very touching
I think anyone who has loved and lost can relate to it, but nore than anything, the loss of a child is most heartbreaking.
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this is so beautiful! my deepest sympathies for your loss as well... i think everyone can relate to the emotions in this poem... it's well written, and it flows fantastically. great write!
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These words could have come straight from Steph's mouth. I know she'll love this. Thank you so much.
Elizabeth
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Excellent
as I startde to read this I felt the ache in my heart grow and as some one else said It can be read as something for a lost love. I lost my husbond of 28yrs just 2 1/2 yrs ago and this made me think so much of him . Sorry for the rambeling and sorry for your frinds loss.You have a good heart to try to ease their pain. -
damn.... this was such a sad yet good poem this was just.. just ... just .. no words keep it up
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keep it up
this piece of poem is lovely. the words are so meaningful keep it up babe .x. -
hell yeah awesome
This was pretty...you have talent you shoule feel special, and i think the background to this was cool...you are just eaten up with coolness yo. -
The pain and anguish shows so clearly through your words of this poem - we feel your sorrow still after so long - I am sure a parent never loses that sense of loss.
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love and love for someone can be very difficult. it is a hard thing to have to deal with. you expressed yourself very well. keep it up. peace.
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Beautifully sad
Beautifully written with deep emotions. It makes it all the more heart-wrenching for the fact that it's true. My thoughts and comforts go out to whomever this is about and to all others who go through the same thing. -
Excellent!! Beautifully crafted!!
My deepest symphaty for the family trying to recover the loss loved one Your friendship and talent honor them as well as yourself for crafting this beautiful tribute
Brava! Well done!!
Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors
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Excellent
This is a powerful write, with alot of thought. It is very touching, it is not just restricted to a mother with lost child but anyone lossing someone dey love and care about.It is very revealing, that is well painted. -
This is so sad! I lost a child many years ago and it's very hard to deal with still. It's sweet that you are doing this for your friend! Great poem!
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I love it. It's really sad and heartbreaking. I'm really sorry and my prayers go out to you. I love how you put your feelings in this poem so everyone can feel it. Great write.
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Such a heart breaking poem. Nothing is more painful than the loss of the child and I give my deepest sympathies to whomever this lovelely poem was written for. The "what-if's" and thoughts of "maybe if I had's" must be devestating.
Brightest blessings,
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i like this poem. it is such a heartbreaking thing when i child is taken so soon. i think that this poem expresses your hurt for them. i like this a lot. i wish all of you the best of luk in dealing with such a tragidy. very nice work. keep it up.
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This is really sad. You did an amazing job though. Putting into words what mothers in this situation must feel. Great write!
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A comforting thought here.
I agree this is excellent work and well I think it will help to comfort her right now. When you miscarry it always leaves you with a lot of what ifs. -
I love it exxlent work
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Aww a sad poem of familial love Keep writing this was really powerful
Thanks for your comment
Best wishes
Pozo
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