We were handicappers each time we went,
impaired by alcohol and the money we spent.
They announced the last race for the day,
losing tickets at our feet like papermache.
This race separates the men from the boys,
a chance to win big and make some noise.
I bet a straight $10 trifecta on the 5-7-9,
all three had higher odds of any equine.
Out of the gates my horses pulled away,
I started yelling loudly "it's my lucky day".
"run you SOB's, as people turned to stare,
I guess they were jealous, but I didn't care.
Reaching the quarter pole it was clear,
ten grand was in the bag as the end was near.
Ready to collect and get out of this place,
a man said "there is still another lap to race".
I realized that was just the first pass,
the races are longer when running on grass.
First time all day, I didn't make a sound,
I turned to my friend, he was not to be found.
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Author notes
I would like to tell you that I made this up. I would be lying and that might take the fun out of it.
Written January 14th, 2006
A contest entry
- Ohhhhhhh That Hurt by Juggalo-King.
600 points, ended September 2, 2008, 12 entries
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that sucks! Too bad you didn't know, but it made a great story!!! lol, but I hope you can laugh about it now! this poem was good, and the exapmle was also good!!! thanks for the entry and good luck in the judging process!
Your judge,
InKy -
Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest. I am really sorry, but you did not make me laugh, as the ending to your piece made me feel really depressed!! Please do not be upset, but I am sorry to inform you that I will have to remove your entry from my contest so as to give someone who has followed my criteria a chance to enter.
If you would like to enter another piece that follows the rules, please do.
Sorry again.
Moira.
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Lol so funny. I too liked the rhythm and flow of the piece. Good luck in the contest
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great
haha
nice stuff..has very good rhythm and flow.. hard lesson to learn but very funny ..thanks for entering and good luck in my contest
best wishes
smilingshadow -
Hell
fell
betting
on racing
nightmare echoes
lowering esteem on gallows.
This Fibonacci is for you thanks for the muse and joining my contest. Smoosh Janet -
thanks for entering wow this sounds like my father lol.
How embarrassing.great read,well done. -
LOL That is why it is not smart to gamble your money away. You end up feeling like total crap. Good lesson taught here even if it is not a true experience. Keep up the awesome poetry!!! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Thanks for the kind words!! I'm glad you took the time to find my poem, I thought you might enjoy it. I will have read more your writes, I ahve a feeling we have a similar sense of humor. Take care!
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hilarious!! so like something i would do! lol! i laughed, then read it again, then laughed....still chuckling to myself. there are moments like that in our life where self-love is absolutely impossible
the poem was easy to read with good rhythm and rhyming..very well written.
much different, you're right, from my "Day at the Races", except that they are both humorous.
thanks for the heads up about your poem, im glad i searched it out.
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Thank you for the Gold trophy and the supportive comments. I'm glad I finally had the guts to write about this experience. Thanks again!!
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Funny
this one is so funny poor you. my mum likes this one to i see her comment. thank you very much for a funny poem -
I hope you do take the time to go. It can be very festive unless you next to some drunk guy. Thank you for the Kind words and the support.
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Great
I just had to laugh at this. I have never have gone to a horse race, but now, thanks to this, I know not to. lol An amusing tale. -
Thanks for the comment! I have been tempted to write about it before when the contest was dealing with your most embaressing moment. Anyway, I'm glad I finally got it out. By the way, I am a horse lover and a racing fanatic. I have learned like with most everything that alcohol does not improve the outcome. Thanks again for the support.
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Brilliant
lol.. very good this one.. perfect rhyme and meter very funny.
Bex is an avid horse fanatic the same as me.. so I am sure she will love this x
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