If you honestly think I still love you
Even after all that you've done
You're even more ignorant than I ever thought
And believe me, that's no small sum.
You can't deny that I've been reduced
To nothing more than you're tool
I've been called only when you were in need-
That's when it was convenient for you.
Your own worst enemy to the core
How dare you come back asking for more
It's a shame I ever called you my friend
It's time for our sisterhood to end
When was the last time you were around
When I was the one in need of help?
All these years you've come running to my arms
Never once did you really wonder how I felt.
You turned down my advice every time
Despite the fact you'd asked for it
Any negative comments were rejected as bias
You took only the words you felt fit.
Your own worst enemy to the core
How dare you come back asking for more
It's a shame I ever called you my friend
It's time for our sisterhood to end
I've lost count of how often I bothered to care
Versus how many times you just needed out
It was always just outside attention you wanted
Positive or negative, in any amount
After all of these years spent knowing you
It's finally time for me to switch sides
And call you on your demanding bluffs
I'm just sorry it took so long to recognize
Your own worst enemy to the core
How dare you come back asking for more
It's a shame I ever called you my friend
It's time for our sisterhood to end
Author notes
Eve, because I know you'll see this first (not that the one this is directed at will EVER see it), no, it's not aimed at you. Our sisterhood has also fallen apart, but our friendship has not. I can't say the same of my selfish twin...
This is far from my best work, but anymore, she's not worth wasting my time on. I'm tired of what I've delt with over the past few years.
PS... As a gold member, I can see who's seen my work. I'm not gonna come hunt you down for not commenting, but I would appreciate comments, even if you don't like this. I can't improve if you don't tell me why you don't like it.
Written January 13th, 2006
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Very sad, but a great piece. I was sucked into it's desperation.
juffle242 -
Ohhhhhhhhh I love this. I just wrote a similar piece for my ex called "You Think"... I was hooked on this in the first verse: "If you honestly think I still love you
Even after all that you've done
You're even more ignorant than I ever thought
And believe me, that's no small sum."
... that's just brilliant. Amazing work, I love the flow and the rhyming's great. Keep it up.
~dramaqueen469~ -
mm k, you want a comment and it seems more than just one having to do with relating person experience. I have problems with repetition, unless it's like a chorus (but the word core is repeated not just in the chorus). I notice some of the words are cut off on the left too. Now if you ignore my quirks - I think it is very strong in emotion and understanding, unlike Annalise I don't think this work is choppy. I think the structure helps punctuate the emotion within it. Now for the person - if it helps I'm everyone’s sidekick and always second best to everyone I know - it sucks!!!
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It's sad when this sort of thing happens. Sometimes it's needed no matter how much it hurts. I understand it. Chin up Lyra, things will be better.
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Choppy and needs some work ironing out details, but strong. The emotional structure of this is good, and though it clearly speaks of a relationship of sorts (friendship, family, whatever) it's vague enough to relate to. When I was younger I felt this way a few times, but now have become detached (sp? It looks odd) from these things. I love the people around me, but chose to not become as "attached" as most. Might seem sad, in a way, but it works perfectly for me.
Good luck with this situation.
Meli -
Yay
I guess I've been in a similar situation. The best friend I've had, for six years, tends to be the same way. I've always been there for her, no matter what stupid thing she's done, no matter how much she's hurt me, no matter how rough things got. But it always seemed when I needed her most, she laughed, she turned away, she kept me in the dark. She stepped on my feelings and left me to feel completely inadequate, useless, desultory. I never felt worse than I did in those few moments. This poem just made me remember how hard it was and brought a tear to my eye. I guess it's worse because I'm BPD and always think people are out to hurt me and always think people are trying to make me feel like shit, but sometimes there's no way it can be about you, except that you've been too giving and nowhere near as greedy as you should have been. I think this was a great poem. You're an amazing poet, and you're definitely one of the best I've read. I hope your mood gets better soon.
-hug-
Riche
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