I tried to leave you,
As I’ve tried before.
This time I got closer,
I about closed our door…
I banished the memories,
Of the good times we had.
I knew it’d be easier,
If I remembered just bad.
I tried to move forward,
leave the past in the dust.
But you had to remind me,
of the love and the lust.
The way that it felt,
When our souls intertwined
And everything good
I was leaving behind
And just like a fool,
Back to you I fell.
Life with you is hard,
But without you it’s hell…
Author notes
Hope y'all enjoy!
Written January 13th, 2006
A contest entry
- Titles R Us by sjgaither.
300 points, ended January 14, 2006, 10 entries
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oh dear... i relate all to well. the flow was not only beautiful it was heartacheingly honest. i thank you for sharing this..
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This reads like a Bon Jovi song! (Which I don't think is a bad thing!) This subject is exhausted but the first stanza is unusually written, which gleans the interest! I'm impressed that you have done such a good job on a subject that lots of people write about. It really stands out.
My only criticism: the rhyme scheme makes it sound a little.
But otherwise nicely done
Love,
Marianne -
So true! Oh! how true it is. Keep on writing.
Blessed be,
LeFay -
Wow.....great write!I can relate to this poem because I have felt the same way.I was in a relationship for a year and everytime I walked or atleast (tried) to leave.....I couldn;t and I got so weak.Sometimes it is hard for us to do what's best b/c our heart is telling us to stay while our head is telling up to do what's right......Great write though!
*DarcyNicole* -
Singing a song I used to sing....ain't it the truth,honey?
Glad you are writing again,it helps.
Love ya,
Deena
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