She has to feed her son
She got pregnant at sixteen
That couldn't be undone
So now she has a routine
She wakes up every day
With a diffent man
Yes, a w.hore you portray
Her name is Suzanne
She stands in a corner
Five dollars an hour
As the men explore her
Her skin they devour
Right there
Behind a wall
They screw her
Sweaty and all
She cries every night
Remembering her disgrace
She hugs her son tight
And kisses his face
All day she begs for food
And at night she comes home
Undresses herself nude
And has sex with Jerome
Brian, David, Jerome, Will
Every night it's someone else
The clock on her wall stands still
Inside the cheap hotel
She wakes up every day
With a diffent man
Yes, a w.hore you portray
Her name is Suzanne
She cries herself to sleep
Black tears painting her face
The secret she keeps
Is nothing but disgrace
She has to feed her son
She got pregnant at sixteen
That couldn't be undone
So now she has a routine
Author notes
Written January 13th, 2006
A contest entry
- Hello everyone and welcome :) by ShinyStar.
320 points, ended January 19, 2006, 19 entries
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Whoa. Wretchedly heartbreaking, but you described it so beautifully, reminding us that life is life and even the ugly becomes beautiful if it means that we're alive. I loved this.
Write on.
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wow this is a really great poem! i got pregnant at 15 and there is many more ways to take care of you children then selling yourself. this is a wonderful write has great flow but not every young mother is like this
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Thanx so much for your comment! I understand not every mother is like this. When I wrote this poem, I was thinking of what so many poor young ladies have to do in my native country, where there is so much ignorance and poverty, although it isn't the case for all of them. I greatly appreciate that you took your time to read my poem. I 'll be reading yours too
. Thanx again!!!
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Thanx so much for your comment! I understand not every mother is like this. When I wrote this poem, I was thinking of what so many poor young ladies have to do in my native country, where there is so much ignorance and poverty, although it isn't the case for all of them. I greatly appreciate that you took your time to read my poem. I 'll be reading yours too. Thanx again!!!
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Lay Naya
Great poem I loved it.!!!!! you got a great talent.I hope that wasn't based on a true story because I'm sorry if it is. But smile because you have a talent that no person or thing can take from you!!!!!!!!!!
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Lay Naya
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Oh. This is a very sad poem that you have written here.
It's sad because these kinds of things really happen to people and everything takes a turn for the worst. At least the girl in your story was trying to do something about it and not just throw her child away and that is very amiable. I think that you've done a good job of expressing yourself. 
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Oh my dear God! This was sooo deep! I just couldn't stop reading! I was so dug in and that's what a true poetry is all about. The words you picked and the topic in general, is one of my favorite things to read. Amazing job. Keep up the great work!
Tori
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Aww man, thats amazing honestly. I mean I have known people to have kids at my age, and younger, but I never have known one of them to go be a prostitute. I just never have heard of that, but she is doing it to find her son. Man...thats heavy. The things people do to sacrifice for their children. I love this alot. Its going to always be in my mind.
Peace n' Luv
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I personally like repititions so I loved this. Great job keep it up
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Ohh..sad...we all know this is happening all around the world...I like this poem,it's AMAZING!
Keep Writing
Best Wishes
~LostMermaid~
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very gud
whoa baby!!! this is soooooo guuuuuuudddd!!! i loved it!!! u have great talent and i love the message in this poem! this is so true to so many ppl out in the world!i say you should never give up on writing!!! very good job! keep it up! 5/5 -
So well portrayed.. I loved how you went and almost.. built the words and feelings up to the middle of the poem, and then back down again as you repeated it, it came off as a very well done book ending in my mind... but im just crazy and have no idea what im talking about.. but yah, I loved it
It is so so so incredibally sad that anyone has to go through this in their lives, and yet it happens to so many of us... i pray to the world that itll never be me.... hell do i pray. This was an excellent peice, very well done. As I said above, so well portrayed 
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Very well written
Very well written poem. Strong feeling comes across. Fine work. -
So sad, but so true, so many have made mistakes in their lives, or had kids when they're just kids themselves, and are not ready for taking care of them, but we all have done things wrong, and this is one way people try to make money to get by for their families...You captured this piece with vivid imagery and truth, thanks for sharing, and thanks for being you!
Much love, Timothy The Poetic Weaver
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You have got some serious writing skills, this is fantastic The story in the poem is all too true these days. I think any one with a child would do what ever had to be done to keep them fed and safe
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Excellent, Compassionate
This is incredibly well written with compassion about a very real and serious problem among many of our young girls. The saddest thing is that they need not go that route, if only they follow our Lord; then, He becomes her husband and I can speak from experience, He is the best husband I've ever had!
This truly is worthy of the gold, so I hope the contest host sees it the same way. Best wishes, though talent such as this doesn't need it!
Love and hugs, B♥nnieQ
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Lovin it
This is an awesome poem! It's on a topic not many people feel comfortable writing about but you did a wonderful job on this piece! This would make an awesome song! I love the edgyness of this. -
descriptive and empathetic write.. sharing with us about emotions of
..prostitutes....who have to sell their souls to different unknown strangers, each and everyday ....
..those who have to obey to the perverted sexual needs of egoistical stranger men and tolerate rapes in the name of sex profession....for money
"She stands in a corner
Five dollars an hour
As the men explore her
Her skin they devour
Right there
Behind a wall
They screw her
Sweaty and all"
pathetic and sad picture....also the men who go in search of such women..?!! equally pathetic..
prostitutes sell their souls for money and.. the men rob the already disgraced soul of prostitues, compensating with money..and sell their own soul for sex with prostitutes
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thank you...I'm not trying to make prostitution sound like a good thing. It's just something I felt like writing. Thank you for your time and oyur critique
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The repetition didn't work for me, and neither did the rhyme. To me that was just one more way of dehumanizing and distancing people from Suzanne. The rhyme takes the reality of her situation away by making it seem like a nursery rhyme. I like the subject though. I think that women who have to turn tricks for a living should not be looked down on by society. If there was no market for what they are selling, they would not have a job. At least they are earning an honest living, unlike some of these corporate thieves. I am getting off the subject.
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the repetition works really well and its just so honest and layed bare.loved it!xxx
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that poem was emotive and powerful, it's o sad when people have to make a living by selling themselves, the prospect is scary, often many people feel it's a taboo to write about this but some things rightfully need to be said,
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Wow. This poem is quite powerful, and the message you write about is different. You have the emotions of this girl perfectly, and the words you use, the images you create are excellent. You've done an amazing job with this poem. Keep up the good work.
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Thanks for oyur lovely comment
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Beautifully written!
Damn! This poem is awesome! I can picture it in my head! Great imagination!lol! Nice job and keep it up!!!
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omg! thats a really good poem pearly! great write! really realistic and its jsut rally good!!! have u read anymore or my poems? some of them arent crazy like un tears and soem other so yea great poem!
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Oh dear.. I don't know what to say!
This is so sad.. It's making me teary, I want to read it again lol!
It's so good and I am very glad you entered my contest with this one, so I got to read it. It's touching, sad and such a wake up! I want more people to read this, to face the truth .
This is the truth. written in a beautiful way. because this poem is truly beautiful and lovely, but so extremely serious and sad that it can make anyone cry.
I like the simplisity of it, you don't try to say things between the lines and you don't say one thing but mean another. No- you just say it staright out to the reader, and that's what's making it such a strong wake-up. It's powerful, and that's what grabs people's heart.
I really liked it, really really really! Thank you so much for sharing it, I am very grateful.
The repetition is so effective and it kinds of rubs it in the point about it, which is a GOOD thing.
Good luck in the conest and thanks.
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I also feel this would make a good song, seeing as how i started singing as i was reading it, it has excellent flow. Very much enjoyed, As i was reading it, the repeating of lines gave it an extra kick of emotion to really help you understand she doesn't want to do this but she has to. very well written.
The Immortal,
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So sad, yet so well written. We can feel her shame yet her need to do this, no education, a son to feed, - repetition is effective - would make a good song.
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