Drifting back into that blissful feeling
Oh God, just by standing next to her elegant frame
Soothes my tainted soul
Let the heavens hear my cry how
Incredible, graceful, happy, and beautiful she is
And I pray through Jesus to Jehovah
That I may never loose sight of her
But all I could pray to have you in my arms
Couldn’t match my affection for your mind alone
You’re all I ever wanted in a woman
And when I say, “I love you, you’re the best.”
I rejoice over the smile that appears on your face
So when I kneel down in the dust
And beg forgiveness for my stupidity
When I acted out of character
Cleanse your disappointment
For I want you to know my mind was unstable
All I want is for you to be happy
So please don’t ever stop smiling
For to feel the warmth of the sunshine from your face
Would be to know what paradise feels like everyday
Oh, how your laugh turns a rotten day anew
How your vibrant light brown eyes reflects your womanhood
How your smooth, curly hair holds a perfect diamond
How your amazing personality embraces the day
But only if I were able to take you home, my queen
I would wash every tear from your cheeks
Blanket you with the most vibrant flowers
Never having to lift a finger
On the ocean spoiling you
Strike the match upon the candle wick
Embrace the sweet low of a bubble bath
Only me and you in the infinite universe
Staring into no meaning, only feeling
I know tangerine potpourri didn’t take us here
So don’t mind me when I say
We’ll dance latter, now is the time to chill
Holding your hand, naturally
Your soft skin giving me goosebumps
It was never a hard decision
But If only
If only
If only I were to have you in my arms
Author notes
Written September 5th, 2004
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I just spent some time reading through all of your poems and decided it was about time that i commented! This poem was incredible! You truly show how much love you have for this person. I wish i could tell you my fave line(s) but i fear id end up reading your entire poem back to you! One line that gave me goosebumps was "strike that match upon the candle wick, embrace the sweet low of a bubble bath" that painted such a beautiful picture... The part where you are apologizing for something youve done wrong was really heartfelt, and i found myself wanting to know how she reacted! "For to feel the warmth of the sunshine from your face Would be to know what paradise feels like everyday" WOW!!!! beautifully written. keep up the amazing work!!!
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Thank you so much! You must have read through quite a number of poems to have reached this one. This piece has never failed to reach girl's hearts.
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Just reviewing my posted comments, and decided to give you applause for the heck of it.
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Wow. I only wish I could find someone who feels like this for me. This is absolutely... elegant. Fantasic. Amazing. It's beautiful. The word use, the rhythm seems to flow even though it doesn't necessarilly rhyme.
It shows a multitude of emotions, more than just the one of "love", and the best poems always explore the dark sides as well as the light ones. (Ex: The last couple stanzas remind me of longing, as well as telling her how you feel about her. Like you're wishing for something you either can't have or have to wait for.)
My only other comment would be to stick with one type of pronoun, because you used "she" and "her" in the beginning and then switched to "you" and "your". I noticed that after reading it a second time, but that's my only suggestion for you to fix. No poetry is perfect, even brilliant writers like you seem to be.
You really do deserve the kudos and applause. (And you're officially on my favorites list, there's no doubt about that now.)
-Et.
Edited on Jan 13, 9:40 p.m. because 'Typos suck.'.
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