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Written January 10th, 2006
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Great idea though a serious stalker might include something on a more personal level to spook out the victim.
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omg. lmao lololol. this is the best poem in the world. Lol. I loved it. Absolutely amzing. Though I'm sure you already know.
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Genius
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great
this poem was great! i loved it, It was chilling, yet catchy. This peom is haunting for many! -
Slick stuff here. Even more so to see the comments it inspired. Most especially "Hedges 776". Now if ever there were a true stalker - see comment & avi below..
This was so worth my time.
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i am certain that i read this before. it creeps me out just as much now as it did then. especially since i still have nightmares from several years of having a stalker as well as an abusive husband. i truly hope this was not written to someone you know and was simply a write on here. thank you (i think) for sharing this with me today. gives me pause to wonder. viyanna rosemarie
ps--think i shall stay home where i know i am safe today.
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Woah....Chills.
Love it
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I see what you were going for here and it didn't really work that well for me. It was a bit underwhelming actually. If I had received this from someone, even if they were serious, I'd laugh at it. This was very superficial and there was nothing to get creeped out about, nothing deep and personal, nothing that delved into the psyche and exume the cautiously hidden and preserved discrepancies and nuances hidden in the crevices of the pessimistic mind of this person. Nothing to catch and hold the reader's attention and make them believe that you are talking about them personally. If nothing else, you have overemphasized the point that you are keeping tabs on this person, like the FBI. There should be sublime, slithering evidence of compulsive obssesion and manic fervor. I sincerely hope that this was helpful and that your next attempt at this or similar work will reflect your improvement, growth and what you have learned. Keep on writing.
P.S.: I also recommend not putting the number of applause in your title, it seems vain and its unprofessional and very unbecoming of a poem, even before the person reads the first line. At least give the reader a chance to figure out for themselves the value of your write. -
just a little bit weird.....
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This is by far the most innovative poem I've read all day. Love the layout of the poem(the image was kinda fuzzy), but you got your point across. Kinday creepy in a good way.
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Meh
The cut out was a cute idea, but the images are fuzzy, which greatly takes away from it. Everything else was, well, not that great. If this is a stalker, he/she can't be more than thirteen years old. Everything is just so juvenile and simple. Despite 499 applauds, this was a serious let-down. -
Wow...creeepy!
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good flow in dis and it looks cool but i found the layout a bit distractin
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Hmmm
It's an interesting layout but the actual poem isn't really that special...the rhymes seem kind of forced. Try posting it in normal text and you'd probably get a lot less of a response from people ... -
Horribly fantastic. Great job and very original!
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http://allpoetry.com/poem/by/Mil check out mine! new to this game and would appreciate some comments cheer
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Very creeply. Liked the letter things, they really did add to an effect, almost like grafitti, you know. Loved the madness streaking out of the write. Very tasteful and creepy.
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Fuck, this was awesome. It gave me chills..and I am really glad you aren't a stalker lol that would be freaky anyway awesome job
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Who me... Im not a stalker, I've Always lived within 20 feet of you
People used to call me a stalker cos I followed this girl around and waited out side of her classes so I could just talk to her and say more than "er... Hi... *smiles*" but now I think you should have a word with them... stalker is used loosly in my case...
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Awesome!
Damn... You got me on the 'bitchy bitch' stuff. I could feel the tone change there. A lot of thought on presentation was put in this. Amazing.
Have some more applauds!
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this freaks me out....good job....
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Wow, this had me on the edge! Makes one think! Glad your your not really a stalker...lol
by the way you are the first one i have given points to im new...
shesh need a blanket and a corner now to hide in.
great job on the after affects of this poem
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lolzzz
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Nervous whistling
Phew!!What a read!!Good job!!
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Wow
I'm pretty speechless, that was AMAZING.
For some reason, I could hear an american teenage girl saying it, made it all the more real.
Great write. Keep it up.
Peace x
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Freaky, but awesome
I loved that! It was so freaky. I almost felt like it was being written to me. The font was especially awesome! I got chills! Two thumbs up! -
woah....
that was rather creepy, but congrats on all the applause you have! It was awesome, i loved it....keep up the good work -
This just cracked me up. Totally cool. I'm sorry if it offends you that I laughed, but I really couldn't help it. I love the last part. "I'm coming..." Your title works perfectly into the poem.
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Chilling
I got goosebumps reading this. Reason being I got something like that when I was being stalked a couple of months ago. This is really good!
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Aaaaaahhhhhh
please don't send that to no one. it good as it is real
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kewl-i-o homie
ehhh manne, this is a kick @$$ poem...the font iz kick ass (how did ya do it) & the meaning iz....interesting
much clown love....peace homie
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I still remember when you first posted this, and the chills I got when I read it. I got them again after reading this again after a really, REALLY long hiatus from AP. Once again, well done!
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Hmm
Cool, I like it, looks like it took a while
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holy crap!
this is awesome!
i got chills as i read it
im sure since this is so popular u hear these things slot but thats freaking awesome!
i absolutely adore the font, and ur rhyming perfects
mood's set perectly also, and u DEFINETELY deserved 2 win whatever the contest was for!!!!!!!
~Natalie
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Wow this is really AWESOME!!!!!!! i love the font you used to! so is this for a contest??? if so u should definately win!!!
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Wow!!!! That was really spooky. Brought me chills all over my body. I actually felt like i was been stalked. That was an amazing poem really. Every bit of it was amazing. Great job. Emily
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this is so chilling and scary! but i liked reading it, it was different and i love the way it was written...the clippings make it so much more real and powerful! great job with this! you scared me!!!
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oh my god. this is chilling terrifying awful
but amazing. great write!
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impossible to turn away from
Necessarily simplistic, but less is much, much better. I received a feeling of elation as I scrolled the page, and the ending exceeded my expectations. It is art, truly.
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Very good
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oh my goodness
wow for a minute there u actually had me beliving u were a stalker. That was really kool the way u put that together. lol
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great poem
this was very creepy and very low but at the same time great and dont worry i'm not a bitchy bitch like some girls i dont like them girls I grew up a tom boy because of these girls i loved this wright and i hope to be your friend and read more of your wounderful poems thanks for sharing and god bless
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Love It
This is very creep, and very cool. I love it! Thanks for sharing. Love and Peace, Charlene
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HMmmmm... WHAT do I "think"? Hey man ... I think you demonstrated YOU have what it takes to become a 'successful' Stalker. You might have even greater success if you took a little more time putting your Note together in MORE READABLE form ... remember, NOT ALL BITCHES (or other victim types) have really 'good' eyesight.
Other than than that relatively minor criticism ... I would say: Hey, you got it made man... YOU have what it takes, YOU HAVE the 'right stuff'(astronautically speaking) to be a "STALKER".
The nagging other question in my mind is: Do YOU HAVE what it takes to be a productive Human Being?
HMmmmm... Love 'n (thoughful thinking) Stuff, RHEY ... -
This is a style of writing hardly anyone uses (if anyone). It's great! And creepy! But mainly great! Anyways, congratulations on writing such an, interesting, piece. ~Ľũčąś~
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That's cool
i like the whole thing...it was so cool...half way through i was actually fearing for my life...hehehehe..really...nice.
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whoa there tiger.......
.....this is fab! Must've taken you ages... this is the stuff the best quality teen horror movies are made of - send it to Wes Carpenter heheheh
Nice one.
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HELL YEAH
Okay this is fucking creative and awesome =] I could never be that creepy! WOOT! lmso. I love it! =]
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i'm sorry
that was very creepy! a friend of M3579 says this. -
ewwwwwwwww
Reminds me of my first drive-in movie...good...anticipating.....giggling, yelling....and then unable to sleep.....liked it in a sick way....
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WOW!!!!!!!
This has GOT to be one of the most disturbing write I've even seen. It's enthralling though...like a car crash you can't look away from. POWERFUL WRITE!!
The fact that it's written like letters cut from magazines creeps me out big time. If this did NOT win a contest or three, then I'd have to see what DID win.
BRILLIANT! STUPENDOUS! AWESOME!
STANDING OVATION!!!!!!!!
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dammOMGdammm
that was awesomeeeeeeeee,my fav. part was your a bitchy bitch and im a bitchy bitch hater,reminds me of a saying i know "so your the bitch,that called me a bitch,well listen bitch,it takes a bitch,to call a bitch a bitch,BITCH!!!!
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Wow
What a powerful write. Scary and very very dark. Keep up the great work and thanks for sharing
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This was such a creepy, weird, and utterly amazing write! I hope this took a prize somewhere! You litterally brought chills to my skin! You must have some deep down pent-up somethin' going on in that head of yours for this packed one hell of a punch! Great job.
Love and luck in all you endeavor.
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Wow, this is seriously super awesome.
I can ignore the tiny mistake of your using "'to' well" instead of "'too' well", it was really that awesome and usually I just stop reading altogether after one of those.
So yeah, awesome job!!!!!
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Great poem
Wow, you really got into your dark side huh.!
Great, just great.
bye
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YEAH
YES
DAMMIT
YES SPEECHLESS!!!
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Oooh, so creepy yet so clever! Well done! This is really original.
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whoa!
This is the first peice of work I have read on this site that litterally sent chills down my spine. Very well done!!
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that is indeed
that is sick (i mean this in a good way)
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Creepy and disturbing. In a good way!
Awesome job...just somehow so...awesome. Applauds.
By the way, I loved the way you wrote the comment, with the newspaper cutout letters...brilliant idea. So fitting!
I liked the rhyming, too. Even though it wasn't the most eloquent, graceful rhyming ever, it was the right 'style' for a poem of such a topic-format-whatever and suited its purpose perfectly. Eerily well, in fact. Are you SURE you're not a stalker? (lol)
Great job!
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fuck me
thats the best thing ive ever seen on here - totally didnt realise you could do that - effing ace
well done- utterly creepy and utterly fantastic
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WOW! This is freaky! My favorite part was:
Cuz your a bitchy bitch and I'm a bitchy bitch hater. It was mean but it made me smile. The scariest part was "And years from now they'll still not know when and how you died"
This is awesome. I can see why its been popular. How did you do this? Scan it in or what -
Awesome!
This is AWESOME! Well done with this write. Sure glad that I clicked on this one. Thanks for sharing this and keep up the great work here!
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Awesome to the nth degree
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pretty awesome
This is cool, very cool
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bomb!!
man this is awsomes, but gave me shivers..
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This is cool
I'm sure it really took you quite a while to do this. Definitely very creative. Keep it up!
~+*Annie*+~
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applauds continuously
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OMG!!!! ThAT SENT ChILLS UP AND DOWN MY SPINE ThE WhOLE TIME I READ IT!!!!! IT'S SO CREEPY AND SO SCARY!! BUT I LOVED IT IT WAS GREAT!!!!! MARVELOUS!!!
Love
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Holy crap! This is brilliant! Creepy, but brilliant
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Oh Em Jee
That was amazing! I read it and I just wanted it to keep going, even though you stopped at the perfect place. The rhyme was extrordinary and I love the way you set it up, with the cut-outs and all. This is one of the best I have ever read. You. Are. Awesome.
'nuff said
~Oreo
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fucking hilarious!
HEHEHE i clicked because your name fucking rocks, and I must say your page fucking rocks as well. Oh yeah lol forgot what i was saying but umm... oh yeah the note from the stalker was pretty hilarious. Two stoner thumbs up
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Scary!!!
If I recieved that It would scare the shit out of me....So, I suppose you did a great job!!! Leslie -
I found it interesting. ..Weird how you put your words up, though. Instead of just typing them.. I guess that's why I like it. It looks like a ransom note.. anyway, bravo
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Scary!
Its sort of scary to think someone stalking another. The "b" parts are a rude, abrupt break from the excellent flow of writing. Well done. -
hell yea! awesum poetry!!! that was really spooky, but good!
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lol hell yeah, that was pretty creepy but awesome just the same
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this is a really good poem. it was creepy
but i think that was the point? really good 
LIZZY
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ok kinda freaked me out, but I liked it (weird huh)
great job on this
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wow
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Uhm, do I know you? You seem an awful lot like that guy that who used to call me every night calling me a whore 'cause I stayed out to late, knew where I ate dinner, who my friends were, etc. Just kidding. Very, very good. As having been a victim of an unknown stalker, I can't describe how acurately you have captured the fear and the anonymity of the whole thing. Amazing really. Brought back old emotions. BTW, I'll be sending you my therapy bill. :-)
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'Very interesting...but stupid.' Nah - joshing - great work and presentation.
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Oh, that was quite excelent,...
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Speechless...
OMG!! I'm speechless!! This kicks ass!! Eerily creepy and mind haunting!! You definitely get my applause!! Loved it!!
~*Lori*~
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A little creepy. I like it! Tops mate tops! I'm a fan of yours King Bongmaster! Keep up the good work
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it fuckin rocks
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fucking kick ass man! I loved it yo! man, that was fucking great dude, lol. well, keep up the good shit man!
See ya later man!
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So blown away! This is a work of art. The poem itself is so strong and the effect just enhances it. The words "I'm coming" have never had more meaning, and the next time that I say them I will think of you.
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OW! Creepy to the fullest. The why the words are written on this page made it even more creepy, which was a plus!
You did an fantastic job!
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awesome
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OMG I got chills....makes me want to go smoke! AHHH Love it!
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hahah, this was amazing. <3 That's what's wrong with the world today... there's just not enough people like you in it. =] People to really make my fucking day. For some reason, I could definitely see this being a little kid's rhyme... maybe even one to jump rope to. =] That's a marvelous idea. When I have a daughter, I shall invite her friends all over to skip rope and sing the little stalker song. How fucking cute would that be? =]
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wow!
HOLY SHIZZIT.
Definitely haven't came on here in forever! And I haven't read your stuff since you joined this site!
wowzers.
Amazing! :]
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THAT IS FUCKING AMAZING KB
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