If you need a hand I’ll give you two
When you’re down I’m there with you
If you come apart, I’ll be your glue
All I ask is your heart
When the rolling waves crash upon your soul
And the howling winds begin to take their toll
I will be there to keep you whole
All I ask is your heart
Are you willing to take my love when you depart?
Carrying a piece of me through it all
Or am I left simply torn apart?
Into the chasm of irrelevance I would fall
Make me giddy, make my spirit gush
Give me your fire, your burning touch
I’ll still come back for the pure rush
All I ask is your heart
Steal all my hopes and my dreams away
Claim them as your own
Still I will come back to you and stay
Do you see all that I choose to brave?
Give you everything you ever crave
Take back all the love I ever gave
All I ask is your heart
Author notes
This is written more or less as a tribute to Bob Dylan's "To Make You Feel My Love." I tried to keep the flow and feel similar, but the words are mine. I hope it's to everyone's liking
Written January 10th, 2006
A contest entry
- Your Best Prewrite by Heavenly Angel.
450 points, ended December 8, 2007, 38 entries
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Awwww
I love this; well done
Thank you so much for sharing and for being a part of the contest
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Thank you for entering! Good Luck!
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This is AWESOME ...It flowed so smoothly ..I love the rhyming...not so predictable...and I love how you took the Dylan style and made a song of your own....Excellent!!!...Good luck...Lynda
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This is a very beautifully written poem. I am sure you will find that special some one that will give you their heart. Keep up the awesome poetry!!!
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beautiful i love it well done ans thanks for entering
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awesome job
This is great. I love the flow it has from line to line, and also the romantic theme and the imagery. You have great descriptions. My favorite lines are:
"When the rolling waves crash upon your soul
And the howling winds begin to take their toll
I will be there to keep you whole
All I ask is your heart"
It flows so smoothly and has a great meaning behind it. Awesome job. Thank you for entering. Good luck!
~dresden-moon
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Beautifully written and I hope you keep writing cause you're great.~EMILY~
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One of my favorite songs...and I think you did it justice. Beautiful images. I agree with Rowan, whoever it's for is a very lucky person.
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"All I ask is your heart" You got it..
I really like the structure of this one Brian, my new favorite.
"When the rolling waves crash upon your soul
And the howling winds begin to take their toll
I will be there to keep you whole"
Love these lines, very romantic write.
Whoever it's for, is one very lucky woman!
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this is something
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