Shaded by her past.
Shattered by her heart.
Crying inside, unbeknown what to do.
She sits on the floor.
Waiting. Just waiting.
And who does she think of?
Not I, Not you. Just Him.
The one who always held her right,
Cuddled her warm and tight.
When she was down, he made her smile.
but she won't see that for a while.
For now she lost the thing she'll miss the most.
The trust and close love.
That he and her so long did share.
Forevermore, It'l still be there.
'Cause feelings like that never fade.
Just hide away into the shade.
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Written January 10th, 2006
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Have found your poems by accident and I like this one so much! Barty is very intrigued by this poem and will try some others. Maybe will add you to faves list soon!
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this poem was extremely heartfelt. From a guys perspective i can see how you feel xxx keep up the good work
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Aww dats well coot huni!11!"2235!we5!!235ou!!i!gaygayfgn!!rkj luff yew 4evz n evz n wot <333<<333<<33333
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This was sad and beautiful. I like ike alot... maybe its b/c i know the feeling... ^_^" Either way it was put together nicely, and this wasa great poem.
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This is beautiful. I like how you only rhys some of the time, so it drips down the side like blood, making the reader read the poem faster towards the end, very effective. The emotions are really strong and well presented, i like it a lot. One thing i noticed though
"Forevermore, It'l still be there."
"It'l" should be "It'll" lol.
Other than that it is perfect. Keep writing
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woah huni dis is amazin! is it about a certain person?! =P lol good write, keep it up! i need 2 start writing more again lol but yer take a look wen i post it on here yer? not that iv written it yet lol... well i have started writing somethin but its not a poem or a story jus...stuff. an its all tru which is kinda bad... but ile show it to u sometime. keep up da good work. xxxx love ya xxxx Mwuah xxxxx Love Lora xxxx
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