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Do you feel me breathing
As I watch you while you sleep?
Close enough to touch you
Yet I never make a peep
I know every inch of your body
Like the backside of my hand
Each dimple, freckle, curve and line
Is a slave at my command
I'm gone before you wake
But I'll watch you all day long
I know the perfume that you wear
And the color of your thong
Can you feel my essence
Inside the clothes you wear?
Can you sense my semen
In that shampoo in your hair?
Do you know I watch you
Through your window at work?
If you knew the things I see
You'd probably go berserk
You know that money that you found
That helped you fix your car?
I got it from a preacher
That I stabbed outside a bar
Every thought and action
Is dedicated to you
If it made your life improve at all
There's nothing I wouldn't do
You are my pet, my one true love
Do you know I exist?
I bet you couldn't pick me out
Of even a short list
In many ways I own you
And you answer to my call
But to the best of your knowledge
You don't know me at all
One day I may reveal myself
And you might find me odd
But until that day, and every time you pray,
I shall be your god

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Written January 10th, 2006

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  • ajocean silver member
    October 11, 2008

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    ok...

    now i have to give credit where it is due which is your ability to write poetry which i believe is very good but as far as your ideas go...what are you smoking dude?


  • Dead Red Head
    October 10, 2008

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    So, that was creepy, and yet I cant help but sort of like it... really like it in fact. You may be a bit sick my friend but undeniably talented nontheless. Well played


  • cosmicrose
    April 4, 2006
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    INTENSE!

    GEEEE... that's intense... you... you... I'm glad I live in the middle of the wilderness so it can't be me you are watching... lol

  • SugarLips
    January 18, 2006
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    creepy... wow you did a great job with this, the flow and rythm was perfect. the semen in the shampoo, killing a preacher for money all very beleivable which made this even more scary...
    -kathy-


  • memnoch
    January 17, 2006
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    Wow, amazing! so much has been already said: Creepy, freaky, etc.. i believe it was a very bold and amazing piece! no one really ever got to capture the insights of a stalker, the way he thinks the way you did here, and i am betting it wasn't that easy, though you make it seem so :-) great write!


  • Jayda1313 gold member
    January 15, 2006
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    Awesome!!!!!!

    This was creepy and very believable I thought the semen in the shampoo was rather gross but other than that I really liked this piece the best.


  • marlenambolden
    January 12, 2006
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    hot

    damn this is some good shit i like this i wish i could applaud it 2 times right now love this keep it up


  • lavi sky rogue
    January 12, 2006
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    Sooooo awesome! An excellent stalker. I liked the rhyming, and the last part is a blast. A very exciting and captivating poem! Good luck in the contest!


  • Aspirin Lullaby
    January 11, 2006
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    Wow... impressive.

    -TMF


  • Lost-Pearls
    January 11, 2006
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    this is feaking awesome! creepy as heck. Good luck int he contest


  • King Bongmaster
    January 11, 2006
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    Damn . Tis was fuckin dope. NIce flow great rythem. You really put it down. You gt my applaud. Good Luck in the contest.


  • the poess
    January 11, 2006
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    excellent

    F*cking GREAT peice!!!!!!!!!!!!
    my favorite on the entire site so far..
    I was really feeling this alot.
    The whole thing was very very interesting and audience grabbing.
    wonderful job, really

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