"sit down and bow
pray for forgiveness of your sins
let me penetrate you
let me in"
sweet girl knows of no limits
in front of the Virgin Mary -
she is taught a lesson
those were bloody tears rolling down her face
or could it have been the tearing of my soul?
as you let yourself in
my young skin tore
as that pint of blood hit the floor
the glass floor I came to respect
took all of our beatings without keeping the mess
couldn't tell if god was watching
sitting there like a porno major
sticky sweet substance on his hands
and spit dripping from his lips
so now I'm 13
on adult TV
sucking my thumb -
really sucking that preacher for some kind of love
to feel accepted and welcomed
that's what he promised:
"you want to be just like the other girls
don't you, don't you
don't you ?"
he'd claim - he had just claimed their innocence
and I saw Jesus
come, come, cuming off his cross
"join in - it's free"
the old preacher man said
and then they wonder now
why I've boycotted Christianity
and they feel no guilt in asking why
they always need a reason
why you don't believe
god himself fucked me
(so I ask of you)
why should I conform to him?
In a list
What did you think
Comments
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Laura-- can I include this in the AP book? It's a little long but I swear I will make the font smaller or something. This is a poem that will stick with people for years and years. It stuck with me. Let me know.
Elizabeth -
A lot of rage is expressed in this poem, and I think you chose to portray it wonderfully. I think a lot of people can relate to it, in the metaphorical way; suffering while they're young and such, and some know it personally which is very sick and sad to boot. I think a lot of people are forced to give up a part of themselves when they take on a religion so strongly, and end up, eventually feeling used and abandoned.
Usually I'm not a fan of random rhyme but this is pretty good; it aids in the piece more than it hinders it.
I like the last verse, it caps off the poem nicely, and I think it gives a wonderful insight as to how someone could end up hating religion so much.
The emotion comes off very clear in the piece, and like I said- very well expressed.
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You have expressed a lot of angry feelings within this poem! I so love poetry like this, since it's one of the most beautiful ways to vent! well done!
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Leander -
a lot of anger in this one. it came out very well though. keep writing. from jeff17songwriter.
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