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Outside

A dark creature crawls
The world is to end today
Alone and afraid

Small butterfly wings
Bring you to me once again
The change is complete

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I don't know thats that about. I really don't. I'm tired, I've not had a good day and I'm off to play Sims 2. *sigh* I love Staind for their random insperation sometimes. *groan* The word "outside" is a very powerful one. As well as this song. Okay i'm babling. Later


Written January 9th, 2006

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  • Always Deena
    January 16, 2006
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    Outside is a grand word that can mean many different things. I see alot of that in this short,strong,beautiful poem. I hope the change in your world is a positive one and that all your dreams come true.
    Deena

  • Just4u
    January 12, 2006
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    inspiring

    I like this...reminds me of the cycles of life and leads
    me to this ku of thought, so thank you...

    metamorphosis
    cycles spun to completion
    as time marches on

    -Eddy


  • Kylia Skydancer
    January 9, 2006
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    interesting concept you've got going here. A little hurried but interesting.

    it sorta makes me think of reading a paragraph from a very good book out of context.


  • MysticalMelindy
    January 9, 2006
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    Very interesting write babe, and I'm sorry to hear that you aren't having a good day. I hope things get better for you. Very dark yet lovely images in this set of haiku, very mournful tone. Have another and some virtual chocolate.