I was living in a shadow
Of someone else's dream
All my life
I've been trying to find
My own reality
I was waiting in the dark
Of my own misery
Waiting for life
To come and find me
So i could finally breathe
I was sitting in the corner
Of the back of my mind
Waiting for someone
Or something
To make my sun shine
I'll stay in the shadow
Until i die
Or until you all hear
My silent cries
Author notes
umm i mean a lil hope, but dark. i dont kno whats rong with me
Written January 8th, 2006
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WONDERFUL WRITING!!!
STUNNING WRITING. I LOVED THIS. I LOVED THE FLOW, THE LAYOUT, THE FORM, THE WORDS, EVERYTHING. IT WAS FULL OF EMOTION, QUITE DARK AS WELL. VERY WELL-WRITTEN. KEEP WRITING, YOU GOT TALENT.
ALL THE BEST
WAYNE
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Poignant
You seem to have a very deep soul that cried out for a little bit of notoriety here. I can relate to the sitting in the corner just waiting to be noticed for real. People often just pass us by or pretend to know what or who we are when really it troubles them to take a deeper look.
I loved this poem and hope someone takes the time to truly look into you and find out just how deep you soul goes.
Love and luck in all you endeavor!
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This is cool. I can relate. Wonderful use of slant poetry. Anyway.... I like it. Great write
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This was great! Wonderful flow and the overall feeling was good. Keep up the great writing!
Darksoul216
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ahh thanx. yea. i kno. but im cought up 2 u right??? if im not tell me cuz i thought i wuz. thanx so much
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WOW!!!! i loved this poem. long time no talk. and i bet be reading more of your latest poems...talk to you later!!! awesome!
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Wonderful job, liked it. It flows like Ashlee's song as well. But it's good nonetheless.
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i think it's good. fuck ashlee simson.
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Nah, other than the fact that the first line's already been used, it's all good.
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wow... arguing. but umm i lyk it. she is right though. those are ashlie simpson lyrics. look em ok. but i mean other then that. i lyk this poem. i think itz true towards you. this is a great job
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I DONT EVEN LISTEN TO ASHLIE SIMPSON. BUT WATEVA. I SEE WHAT YA TALKIN BOUT I SAW THE LYRICZ. UMM IZ THATS ALL U GOTTA SAY?
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HUH????
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The first line is a line from an Ashley Simpson song where she's singing about how her sister (Jessica Simpson) used to be so much better than her and junk...
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