As beads scatter in a
Nonchalant manner,
The synthetic droplets
Shift along the concrete.
In your supple rigid palm
Peer a couple more tears.
The pearls you had saved,
Like myself, a long time ago.
…Alike they are forsaken,
Baffled, taken to the ground,
Discarded by your blue eyes,
And broken by your hand.
Glass and I are common beings,
Fragile in your company,
Snapped by your affection,
Weeping, shattered by collision.
Away you tread, not only on soil,
Alas, I stitch up the pieces.
Author notes
This came to me when a friend told me her ex boyfriend broke her beaded braclet in the middle of the street, and when she yelled at him asking why he broke her bracelet, he just walked off.
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Written January 8th, 2006
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I love your choice of words, what you used really fits. the poem flows nicely, its really nice. i like the first stanza alot. great job on the poem and keep writing.
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Kankainiku -
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Yes I suppose its true, when you're in a relationship with someone, you become fragile. I like the metaphorical meaning. Great write. Good luck in the contest
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Lovely poem with a great content, but what grabbed me most was the vocabulary and the words you're using. It looks so prof and sounds amazing. I am a huge fan of advanced words, and I love reading poems with them in. Brilliant, thanks for sharing!
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Wow! Amazing descriptiveness. Also, a WONDERFUL choice of words. Each word has been chosen so well. Overall, a very powerful write. Well done!
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I agree with Illiterate Iguana you have some really powerful descriptions in this write. Personally, the third stanza is my favourite. Good job. Keep it up.
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