Materialism is people's greatest downfall, next to love I assume.
The more we possess the more we crave before we all self-destruct: more shopping to feed our cancerous loneliness and misery. We never take the price tags off our newly bought clothes and yet we cast them away as rags; donate them to starving children for our own satisfaction.
The truth: we are selfish pigs wasting away on a planet that is doomed to self-destruct like us. We waste away nature as if it was our creation. Or it was only on this planet for our sadistic pleasure.
All I want is a pen and paper on a deserted island. Destroying all the trees for a blank slate until there is no oxygen left to fill my lungs.
The Irony: I won't even suffocate from the lack of oxygen but from the lack of sufficient paper to write upon.
Life: one big whirlpool of contradiction. Do you know what makes me weary? The compulsive need to write. My hands are aching and still I batter them in a war neither of us is really striving to win. Perhaps secretly you are!!
The world has to life according to your beliefs and laws to survive.
We are all sentenced to death, whether by our own hands of those of humanity. Why don't you knock on our doors like ancient times and cut open our throat cause living according to our own beliefs is in your eyes a lie.
I am probably a fool, but I need my downfall and I need you.
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Don't ask cause I do not know, not yet. It just came to me and I hope it appeals to any of you
Love D.L.
Written August 31st, 2005
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wow
wise and prophetic ..you are so very correct..materialisma nd too much selfishness may sound our doom one of these days,Gess you thought this hard over. Well done. have very simiplar sounding poems on my page...please visit may be you can see and derive more soul comfort. -
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amazing
me like, me like alot, great write, I can sense the anger your throwing at society, the way your words just penetrate the mind and make you think, it was amazing. -
Wow, what a truly amazing piece! It really makes you think about your own actions- even laugh about the sort of things we think and do. Especially with what it is doing to our world.
We are our own downfalls.
I loved the part which started with 'We are all sentenced to death' I thought that was truly brilliant.
This was a very deep piece which I enjoyed reading. Keep up the good work. Well done! -
kick ass
Wow. This speaks a lot of truth. This is amazing. Not really a poem, but hey things just come to you and that's that. It's a wonderful write great job. Keep up the good work. -
This was a very deep write, full of emotions, but i didnt get a poetry feel out of it. It was moving, but I know that you could make it have the right feel.
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The content of this is deep and moving, but feels too much like prose instead of poetry. Try re-wording so as to make it poetry. I applauded you for the deep raw material, though.
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Confusing and confused. And you confuse "cause" with "because" which is pretty horrible.
The last sentence sounds like an ad for life assurance....
"Without good insurance we are all sentenced to death. Why don't you knock on our doors like ancient times and cut open our throat cause living according to our beliefs is in your eyes a lie."
Revision and rethinking needed to make this good. But shows promise.
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LOl! umm WOW! I dont know what to say this was so butally honest and I find myself likeing it. Oh what the Hell.. this was great.. this was really really appealing. I am speechless. so yeah wonderful write here.
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