The clouds were gilded gold above the sun
then mellowed out into the pinkest flame
a slender line did blaze atop each one
and acted as a luminescent frame
The darkest gray still covered well the light
and only round the edges morning glowed
But as the sun rose higher in her flight
more color to the picture was bestowed
Quite suddenly the atmosphere was stroked
by amber rays reflected off the sea
it hit the nimbus knolls and saffron soaked
the sky above the darker clouds with glee
an aura danced across the sprightly swells
that caught the shades of salmon from our star
We watched in awe as sunbeams cast their spells
and rained down on the ocean from afar
God’s fingers reached right down to calm the waves
as they, caressed the beach we stood upon
For moments you and I were willing slaves
enchanted by the stunning birth of dawn
Patricia Gibson-Williams
January 8, 2006
Author notes
I haven't slept all night so if this sucks, blame it on me having hallucinations. LOL I wrote this about a sunrise Joe and I watched on the beach a few weeks ago when we were in Florida. It was the most beautiful sunrise I’ve ever seen. Most likely the most beautiful I will ever see. We had 3 cameras with us on the trip, and I forgot to take one that morning. I did run up to the hotel room and get the camera in time to take a few beautiful pictures, but not the best ones, they will have to live in my memory. I can’t paint so this was my attempt to pay homage to the vision of that sunrise. Trust me I didn’t do it justice. The picture is one I pieced together and then edited after searching thousands online to find something that came even close to the one I viewed. I had trouble even finding one that had “God’s fingers” (the vivid rays of light that sometimes shine from behind the clouds) let alone one that had clouds that the sun reflected off of so brightly that top edges glowed like embers. I just love cut and paste, to give you what you need don’t you? I hope you like my humble attempt to honor God’s work. Patti
Written January 8th, 2006
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A contest entry
- 1,000 point Rhyming Masterpiece Contest by Ellis.
1000 points, ended January 15, 2006, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Your descriptive words captured God's work of art. The imagery presented made it possible for a reader to experience the awesome sight you have witnessed. Goodluck.... mutya
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good stuff
One of the best poems about a sunset I've ever read! -
This is a beautiful poem depicting what must have been a glorious sight
Very nicely written and brilliantly descriptive!
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Even without your comments I knew this was about a sunrise. It is very beautiful. The rhyme is very well done. It doesn't overpower the poem itself. The format, font and background also add to it. It is very beautiful as well as the picture. Good job!
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I can see it all!
oooh....melikes a lot. powerful! I can really picture it all in my mind. woohoo! -
v. nice
This is great. The flow seemdd effortless and the imagery was beautiful. -
a lovely poem filled with beautiful images. nice work on the rhyme and meter and the painting is gorgeous. loved these lines:"an aura danced across the sprightly swells
that caught the shades of salmon from our star
We watched in awe as sunbeams cast their spells
and rained down on the ocean from afar" -
No dear friend.It's a great piece and not a hallucination at all.You've written it very well.
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ah, wonderful images, i have watched many a sunrise and many a sunset on the gulf coast. such inspiring beauty can only come from a magnificent creator, how wonderful is the beauty God gave us to enjoy! this poem is a work of art too, i can see the coloours you describe, across a sky and smell the salty water, feel the breeze, you really took me there with this stunning write!
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THat is so sweet. The sunset is quite captivating and such a great inspiration. I think you have accomplished honorings god's work very well. Best of luck to you on this competition.
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Thank You
Patti, thank you much for your real fine entry
This Contest is going to be the best!
I may never win one myself in a century,
But I may be having the best contest! -
I know the sunrise might have been fantastic, but so is your poem. What a wonderful work; and rhyming too: that is not easy, and it is NOT forced in your work but pure talent!
In my part of the country (the high plains) it's not the sunrises, but the sunsets, that are on occasion: fantastic.
I wish you all the best in your poetic endeavors. -
Hi, then I suggest you write more when you are this tired as this is a very lovely write and the visuals are wonderful, great my friend , now don't sleep for the next three days, lol, great write, loved it, hugs Di
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beautiful, this is beautiful, it's perfect and romantic and can only come from a brilliant poet.
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beautifully written, rhyming is great and the imagery is fantastic. It makes the world still reading this unique description of a sunrise.
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Lol this definately does not suck it is beautiful and has a great flow to it. I love watching sunrises and sunsets (sunsets mostly) the picture is also great.
Awesome Work
XXX
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