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These wings are mine

Introspective doorways to my mind
through cloudy eyes, they hide,
Where shadows dance on fleeting feet
and the deepest desires abide

Your face is plastered in my dreams
beyond the curtained wall
Where pleasant memories give me wings
and courage to take the fall

Claws cling at my back and hands
tangled in the shreds of humanity
War breaks out with dim light and strife
smoke rises from a trampled city

Eyes peer at me from all this pain
and the love in them draws me in
If all the earth felt such emotion
we'd all be cured of our sins

For these wings are mine to carry me away
they beat like the love in your heart
I'm waiting for that star to fall
to wake up, and get a new start





Author notes

dark angel...uhh commented on Filtered, applauded your "you pt 2"...option 6 the title u gave me was "these wings are mine"...
Written January 7th, 2006

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  • black-eyeliner
    July 3, 2006
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    ..wow..

    Wow... this is amazing... I'm at a loss of words. It's beautiful and I love the flow. Great job. Keep it up!

    -gC~


  • Butterfly Goddess
    January 17, 2006
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    three stars * * *

    YOu did a good job with using the title I gave you, but the only place I really saw it make a connection to the poem was the last stanza, and the last stanza just doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem. Forgive me please if I am wrong but I feel as though the last stanza was only added so that there would be a small connection to the title. Honestly, If you had made a poem revolving around the last stanza, that would have been a lot better. With the poem you have now it just doesn't fit. I did find the poem interesting though. It was very captivating. I do like how you wrote this poem, but it could have seemed a little more on topic. I'm sorry if that wasn't stated clearly when I gave you the title. THat is a fault on my part. THank you for entering though and good luck.


  • Cossack
    January 15, 2006
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    holly this is Ben
    your poem is cool i love it

  • Cossack
    January 11, 2006
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    holly...really shweet, that's all i got to say...apparently that poetry unit in English really helped!! not! i'm never gonna use it again. really nice though...i haven't written a new one in ever...peace




    -L