Your body is a special place'
Red cells White cells float in space;
Organs,muscles,and tissues are there'
All in your system very rare:
God surely created you,
So keep yourself pure and true
That is what God would want you to do
Author notes
I know this is a short poem and sort of differant,but I had to write this piece for my health class at my school so I decided to post this.
Written January 7th, 2006
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well thank you for the comment. I put this piece up when Tim (sharcu) and my sister wouldn't stop bugging me about posting something on here. this is not a very great piece, and i'm not very proud of it, but thanks for the comment anyways!!
Kimberly
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Awsome poem and not a bad mini-sermon either.
Keep up the good work.
God bless you
RH -
NIVE KIMMM!!! LOVE IT!! KEEP UP THE GOOD WOrk!!!
~Candi~ -
good job!! I like how it is sort of basic, but so true. Your right, let us keep our bodies pure for God *~*
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this is great! you need to respect your body, and not cut, no matter how stressed you are! keep writing, you are excellent at it!
Lynne
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hey sis...great poem for your first one. Keep writting and you'll do great. Don't get discouraged and if you need help, you know where to find me.
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~*Chelsea*~ -
Short sweet and very good. Great rhyming too. Well done!
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amazing!
I'm very suprised indeed! You are good at rhyming then! I'm sure that you are a very divine writer and you just proved it. Interesting how you could put god and a human body together, it really works in here.
Well done, you have really great potential for a writer!!
mars -
hmm... not exactly wat i was expecting... but then again... wat was i expecting? i hav issues with rhyme, so i respect ppl who can come up with it like that! this is awesome dude!
mushy -
Cool Poem kid ...I hope you like writing,because I think you've got great potential!!!
God bless -
WONDERFUL POEM
This was such a lovely poem. I really enjoyed your rhyming. It was awesome. It was great ready about the body and what it consist of. A truly delightful poem I enjoyed reading. Take care, Sandy
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HEY this is good! short, sweet, and to the point. i like it! The point you make is so true... keep you body pure because it really belongs to your Creator, not you. I agree with Simply Divine, this is very unique. I've never read a poem like this one. You'd better get a good grade on this, because if you don't... well, there's not much i can do about it. But you DESERVE a good grade that's what matters.
i hope you put more stuff on soon. i look forward to reading it.
God bless
aleicia
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for such a simple poem it says a great deal! talking abotu our body as a temple for God, how we need to honor it, and keep is sacred. Very beautiful poem, simple and yet complex, speaing of more then the physical aspect of our body but the spiritual one as well. amazing JOb!
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I think that not only is this an awesome piece in general, but an even better one in the face of writing it for your health class at school! Spirituality and love for The Lord is lacking so much and so greatly in schools these days, and it just feels really great to know that there are people like you out there who still are being blessed enough to be able to bring it into the class room.
You have done an excellent job, and I am very appreciative of you sharing this with us and God allowing you to be a part of this community and school. May God bless you, your friends and your family.
-- Justin -
thank you for commenting to my poem
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this is cute, are body is a temple, God created us and wanted us to take care of ourselfs, physicaly and mentialy. Thanks for sharing, Great job
Good Day, a stór -
sorry it took so long tim don't go all weird now.
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I like that a lot actually Its really cute, and so true. I don't think I've ever read a poem quite like it, which is awesome, because its always fun to find something different. Awesome write, keep it up, cuz we'd all love to experience whatever other clever rhymes you have up your sleeve Oh, and I really like that you've encorperated God into all of these, since He is the reason for everything. Great job
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I really enjoyed this poem you have here. God is amazing and he made us. Everything about us. Its kinda cool because he knows every strand of hair on are heads. Great write.
God bless
mary -
Finally! Geez! You were the only person on my favorites list that hadn't ever written a poem... lol Now... you told me not to leave you a bad comment... well... hrm.... I'd have to try really hard to come up with something bad to say about this poem. Oh, one suggestion with the catagory, put it also into "spiritual" since you do mention God. Oh, just curious, do you go to a Christian school or is your teacher Christian? Otherwise this might not get a very good grade... since it does talk about God and everything. It makes it a little bit more personal of a poem than your first part. I like your rhyming with AABBCCC. Now I'm not sure about the colon after the word "rare"... not sure if that belongs or is grammatically correct. As far as the poem part goes... it's very well put together. It's simple, yet I like more simple poems that complex type poems. Fantastic work! I hope you get a good grade in your class... and if you don't, well, your teacher just doesn't know what good poems are. I hope to see more of your work posted on here soon.
--Tim
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