Please tell me you'll remember, dear
After some years have passed
My spirit always will be near
Please tell me you'll remember, dear
Though I am gone, shed not a tear
Nor let you be downcast
Please tell me you'll remember, dear
After some years have passed
I never truly left, you see
Though, some may say I did
I never truly left, you see
My spirit now has become free
Though spiritually, I am still me,
The physical I rid
I never truly left, you see
Though, some may say I did
We'll dance together in your dreams
I pray you will remember
Though, distant you now think I seem
We'll dance together in your dreams
The love we share shines like beams
Let's not let it fade to embers
We'll dance together in your dreams
I pray you will remember
Author notes
A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines
repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital
letters representing the repeated lines.
Written January 7th, 2006
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I apologize that I didn't define a triolet in my author's comments. Per the rules of the form:
A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines
repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital
letters representing the repeated lines.
I am also sorry that you found this write to be simplistic. The rules mandate it be so. Thank you for your comment.
Edited on Jan 07, 4:11 p.m. because ''. -
loved it
That was cool. I like that part
I never truly left, you see
Even though it's only one line it just kind of caught my eye. If someone was screaming at me while I read this I doubt I would have even been able to tell them to shut up. I was entranced and when I got to the end I was sad that it was over. Great job. Can't wait to read more of your work. Keep it up. -
wow you repeated three different words in each stanza...now that takes some talent..especially when the word you are rhyming is a commonly used rhymed word. *rolls eyes*
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This was very interesting and sweet. I'll definetly remember this poem, dear! hehe. It was original and kept me interested. I like the structure, and the rhythm was great! The imagery is fantastic and it flows nicely. I truly enjoyed reading this… I love how it seems to mesmerize you in certain parts so that you just don’t want to stop reading. It just draws you in. The emotion I felt was astounding! Wonderful! Keep up the great work! Maybe one day you can become a famous poet! I hope to read some more of your work sometime. Congratulations on a wonderful piece of art, and keep writing!!
Brandon
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